From 5e4ff6ce8578841ee565962bb308afb6870cb96e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Bowie Date: Sun, 3 Oct 2021 20:40:19 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] tone down pauses in ch6 --- ....anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy | 1141 +++++++++-------- 1 file changed, 609 insertions(+), 532 deletions(-) diff --git a/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy b/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy index 454efea..c4256c6 100644 --- a/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy +++ b/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy @@ -11,14 +11,14 @@ label chapter_6: "I’m laying in bed on a saturday morning." - "It’s been raining the last few days,{w=.4} so I’m stuck inside." + "It’s been raining the last few days, so I’m stuck inside." "Not like I had any other plans anyways." pause .5 "The forecast says it should clear up later today." - "There’s no new games out,{w=.4} and my backlog is just the perfect size of fuck that noise." + "There’s no new games out, and my backlog is just the perfect size of fuck that noise." "I don’t even feel like baiting on a certain basket weaving polynesian forum." pause .5 @@ -37,7 +37,7 @@ label chapter_6: # B: these lines look like they've been updated in the script doc "Never imagined I’d have so many actual pictures on it." - "Each one brings a vivid memory to mind,{w=.4} usually an embarrassing one." + "Each one brings a vivid memory to mind, usually an embarrassing one." "But there’s some other ones{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -57,30 +57,32 @@ label chapter_6: show anonphone with easeinbottom pause .5 - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Looking for new band venue" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Looking for new band venue" - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Don’t feel like going alone" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Don’t feel like going alone" pause .5 - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Do you want to come with?" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Do you want to come with?" pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Alone{nw}" play sound 'audio/effects/alarmklaxonloop.ogg' fadein 0.5 - extend "{cps=*.1}...?{/cps}{w=.4} No,{w=.2} shut the fuck up alarms." - + extend "{cps=*.1}...?{/cps}" + + "No, shut the fuck up alarms." stop sound fadeout 3 + pause .5 - "Anon:{fast}{w=.3} Why alone?" + "{i}Anon:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Why alone?" - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Trish has a horn appt and Reed is" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Trish has a horn appt and Reed is" pause .5 #"A pause." "{i}'Fang is typing...'{/i}{fast}" pause .5 - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Preoccupied." + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Preoccupied." pause .5 #cut to Reed in bathroom cg @@ -88,15 +90,15 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 #cut back to Anon - "Anon:{fast}{w=.3} Alright, where we dropping?" + "{i}Anon:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Alright, where we dropping?" - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Just show up at my place in like an hour" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Just show up at my place in like an hour" - "Fang:{fast}{w=.3} Need to go now" + "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} Need to go now" pause .5 - "Anon:{fast}{w=.3} k" - stop music fadeout 4 + "{i}Anon:{/i}{fast}{w=.2} k" + stop music fadeout 6 pause .5 hide anonphone with easeoutbottom @@ -109,6 +111,7 @@ label chapter_6: "A friend I have feelings for." "And we’re alone." + pause .5 play music 'audio/OST/Fuck You I Like To Shitpost.ogg' fadein 1.0 scene room anon day with Dissolve(1) @@ -125,13 +128,13 @@ label chapter_6: "To top it off I insult the mods and then report my own post so I know they have to see it." pause .5 - "I am become Anon,{w=.4} Collector of (You)s and Poster of Shit." + "I am become Anon, Collector of (You)s and Poster of Shit." pause .5 stop music fadeout 4 "By now the rain has subsided." - "Still feeling refreshed,{w=.4} I grab my jacket and start making my way across town to Fang’s house." + "Still feeling refreshed, I grab my jacket and start making my way across town to Fang’s house." scene black with fade @@ -146,9 +149,9 @@ label chapter_6: "Images of what’s to come pass before my eyes unwarranted." pause .5 - "Looking for restaurants{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} because they’d be good venues of course!" + "Looking for restaurants{cps=*.1}...{/cps} because they’d be good venues of course!" - "Walking through the mall maybe?{w=.4} That’d be a good spot." + "Walking through the mall maybe? That’d be a good spot." "The day turns to night and the temperature drops." @@ -177,7 +180,7 @@ label chapter_6: "The bus stop is luckily only a block away from Fang’s neighborhood." - "There’s a few stores open,{w=.4} and a street vendor is gleefully setting up shop for the first time in a few days.." + "There’s a few stores open, and a street vendor is gleefully setting up shop for the first time in a few days.." pause .5 "She calls out to me as I pass." @@ -192,7 +195,7 @@ label chapter_6: show anon: easein_back 1 xalign 0.1 - SV "Some storm,{w=.5} eh?" + SV "Some storm, eh?" pause .5 show tracy unimpressed: @@ -203,41 +206,41 @@ label chapter_6: show anon neutral with Dissolve(.25) pause .25 - A "Oh,{w=.3} uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} yeah.{w=.4} It was." - - SV "People don’t usually take the bus here these days,{w=.4} where ya headed?" + A "Oh, uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} yeah. It was." pause .5 - A "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} over to the suburbs over there." + SV "People don’t usually take the bus here these days, where ya headed?" - SV "Highschooler,{w=.4} taking the bus to the suburbs on a Saturday{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + A "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} over to the suburbs over there." + + SV "Highschooler, taking the bus to the suburbs on a Saturday{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 show tracy tease with Dissolve(.25) - SV "You’re going to see a girl,{w=.4} ain’t{w=.15}cha?" + SV "You’re going to see a girl, ain’tcha?" show anon: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.05 pause .25 A "How did{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - A "I mean,{w=.4} I am,{w=.2} but{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} I-{w=.2}it isn’t like that,{w=.2} you know?" + A "I mean, I am, but{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I-it isn’t like that, you know?" # B: line changed in script doc - SV "Come{cps=*.25} onnnn,{/cps}{w=.3} you can’t fool me." + SV "Come onnnn, you can’t fool me." # SV "WAH-HA!! I’m certain it ain’t." - SV "At any rate,{w=.4} why not pick up a few ‘dogs to impress her?" + SV "At any rate, why not pick up a few ‘dogs to impress her?" - SV "We got ice cream too,{w=.4} if she’s an herbie." + SV "We got ice cream too, if she’s an herbie." pause .5 - A "Maybe later.{w=.4} I’ll keep it in mind." + A "Maybe later. I’ll keep it in mind." pause .5 show tracy unimpressed show anon neutral flip with dissolve - "I turn to leave,{w=.4} behind me I hear the vendor mutter to herself." + "I turn to leave, behind me I hear the vendor mutter to herself." show anon: easeout_cubic 1 xalign -0.15 @@ -245,44 +248,47 @@ label chapter_6: show anon: easein_elastic 0.5 xalign -0.2 show tracy neutral - SV "Ah,{w=.3} to be young and in love again{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + SV "Ah, to be young and in love again{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}I pick up the pace." - stop music fadeout 4 + stop music fadeout 6 show anon: easeout 1 xalign -0.9 hide anon with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 - scene black with fade + scene black with Dissolve(1.5) + pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 "The difference between Fang’s neighborhood and my apartment complex is night and day." - "The smell of burnt tires doesn’t hang in the air.{w=.4} Instead it’s a mix of Cedar and wet pavement." + "The smell of burnt tires doesn’t hang in the air. Instead it’s a mix of Cedar and wet pavement." "The knife in my pocket feels excessive as an officer’s car passes by." pause .5 - "I suppose to someone who's lived here it would seem normal,{w=.4} but to someone from bumfuck nowhere?{w=.6} The suburb felt decadent." + "I suppose to someone who's lived here it would seem normal, but to someone from bumfuck nowhere? The suburb felt decadent." pause .5 play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoorloop.ogg' fadein 4 scene home fang outside with Dissolve(1) pause .5 + "Fang’s home is easy enough to find thanks to Gruugle maps’ images." - - "It’s nice.{w=.5} Very nice actually.{w=.5} Two stories tall and with an expensive,{w=.2} if kinda scraped up,{w=.2} sports car in the drive-way." - - "I approach the home,{w=.4} careful to hop up the spread stones that make up the walkway,{w=.4} in fear of trampling the well manicured yard." pause .5 - "At last I’m at my destination.{w=.5} Fuck." + "It’s nice. Very nice actually. Two stories tall and with an expensive, if kinda scraped-up sports car in the drive-way." + + "I approach the home, careful to hop up the spread stones that make up the walkway, in fear of trampling the well manicured yard." + pause .5 + + "At last I’m at my destination.{w=.4} Fuck." pause .5 show anon neutral at aleft with dissolve @@ -290,12 +296,12 @@ label chapter_6: "I stand frozen on the white porch now with the front door before me like the ramparts of a castle." - "Am I supposed to knock,{w=.4} or text her that I’m here?" + "Am I supposed to knock, or text her that I’m here?" pause .5 - "Crap,{w=.4} I’ve never done anything like this before." + "Crap, I’ve never done anything like this before." - "Go with a friend to find a venue for a band,{w=.4} that is." + "Go with a friend to find a venue for a band, that is." pause .5 menu: @@ -325,6 +331,7 @@ label chapter_6: show dimmer_darker behind anon with vpunch hide dimmer_darker with Dissolve(1) + pause .5 "{cps=*.5}{i}What is this killing intent?!{/i}{/cps}" @@ -338,7 +345,7 @@ label chapter_6: with Dissolve(1) pause .5 - unknown "Hm{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.5} you Anon?" + unknown "Hm{cps=*.1}...{/cps} you Anon?" play ambient 'audio/effects/alarmclicheloop.ogg' fadein 0.5 show dimmer_lighter behind anon with Dissolve(.25) @@ -348,7 +355,7 @@ label chapter_6: stop ambient fadeout 1 hide dimmer_lighter with dissolve - A "Y-{w=.1}yeah,{w=.3} I’m Anon.{w=.4} P-{w=.2}pleased to m-{w=.4}meet you uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + A "Y-yeah, I’m Anon.{w=.4} P-pleased to m-meet you uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 FD "{cps=*.25}{i}Executioner.{/i}{/cps}" @@ -363,7 +370,7 @@ label chapter_6: "My pants feel heavy and sodden." pause .5 - unknown "Honey,{w=.4} who is it?" + unknown "{size=-5}Honey, who is it?{/size}" hide dimmer_darker with Dissolve(.25) show fangmom: @@ -373,7 +380,7 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause .5 - FM "OH!{w=.4} You must be Anon!" + FM "OH! You must be Anon!" hide dimmer_light with dissolve FM "Come in come in!" @@ -405,33 +412,37 @@ label chapter_6: yalign 0.0 xalign 0.4 with Fade(1, 0, 1) - "The petite ptero-matriarch drags me into her abode.{w=.5} I could see the patriarch’s jaw clench as Fang’s mother pushed me into the comfiest couch to ever exist." + "The petite ptero-matriarch drags me into her abode. I could see the patriarch’s jaw clench as Fang’s mother pushed me into the comfiest couch to ever exist." pause .5 - FM "Oh you must forgive my little Lucy,{w=.4} she’s still getting ready for your date!" + FM "Oh you must forgive my little Lucy, she’s still getting ready for your date!" pause .5 "Oh god I can feel iron-sights on my back." pause .5 - "While she spoke a mile a minute I managed to catch some of the words.{w=.5} I ignored the latter,{w=.4} because this{w=.2} ISN’T a {cps=*.3}daaaa-{/cps}" + "While she spoke a mile a minute I managed to catch some of the words." + + "I ignored the latter,because this{w=.2} ISN’T a {cps=*.3}daaaa-{/cps}" "Isn’t THAT!" pause .5 "But-" - A "Ah,{w=.3} it’s uh,{w=.4} no trouble ma’am." + A "Ah, it’s uh, no trouble ma’am." - A "But uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} I thought her name was Fang." + A "But uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I thought her name was Fang." - "She titters,{w=.4} holding a hand over her sly smile." + "She titters, holding a hand over her sly smile." - FM "Oh that?{w=.4} My little tooth fairy always loves to re-invent herself." + FM "Oh that? My little tooth fairy always loves to re-invent herself." "Her eyes gloss over as she’s pulled into her own memories." - FM "One moment she was the prettiest princess pirate,{w=.4} and now she’s some sort of rock and roll maestro!{w=.5} The {i}imagination{/i} she has{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + FM "One moment she was the prettiest princess pirate, and now she’s some sort of rock and roll maestro!" + + FM "The {i}imagination{/i} she has{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 show fangmom: @@ -452,11 +463,13 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "You good?" pause .5 - "I breathe deeply,{w=.4} collecting my scrambled thoughts into a semi-coherent state." + "I breathe deeply, collecting my scrambled thoughts into a semi-coherent state." - A "I’m good{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} So uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} nice place." + A "I’m good{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + + A "So uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} nice place." - "I look at the walls of the room,{w=.4} what little white I could see that wasn’t covered by the myriad of family photos." + "I look at the walls of the room, what little white I could see that wasn’t covered by the myriad of family photos." pause .5 "Huh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} she really was a princess pirate at some point{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -470,7 +483,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show naomi happy with Dissolve(.25) - N "Home is where the heart is,{w=.3} {nw}" + N "Home is where the heart is, {nw}" show naomi: ease 0.25 yalign 0.05 ease 0.25 yalign 0.0 @@ -483,27 +496,27 @@ label chapter_6: "Oh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} is that a sin to think that with that cross hung behind Naser’s head?" show naomi neutral with dissolve - "I look back to see the Cream Queen of the Kremlin,{w=.4} a tray of the smallest cups I’ve ever seen in her arms." + "I look back to see the Cream Queen of the Kremlin, a tray of the smallest cups I’ve ever seen in her arms." show naomi explanatory - N "Naser!{w=.4} Your mother made us some tea!{w=.4} Oh isn’t she the most wonderful woman!" + N "Naser! Your mother made us some tea! Oh isn’t she the most wonderful woman!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) show naser unimpressed flip - Nas "Bleh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} she knows I’m not a fan of that hot leaf juice{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Nas "Bleh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} she knows I’m not a fan of that hot leaf juice{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) show naomi: ease_cubic 1.5 xalign 1.2 pause 1 show naomi neutral flip with dissolve - "Naomi navigates around the couch and coffee table,{w=.4} setting the tray of treats and tea before us." + "Naomi navigates around the couch and coffee table, setting the tray of treats and tea before us." show naomi explanatory flip - N "Would you like some,{w=.2} Anon?" + N "Would you like some, Anon?" show naomi neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) - A "I’ll pass,{w=.4} thanks." + A "I’ll pass, thanks." pause .5 "Something’s not right with what just happened." @@ -513,13 +526,13 @@ label chapter_6: "The entire opposing wall is covered in various hunting trophies." - "Two bears,{w=.4} a whole school of fish,{w=.4} a falcon,{w=.4} two deers{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "Two bears, a whole school of fish, a falcon, two deers{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 "And a rhinoceros." pause .5 - "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{cps=*.6}I may have made a huge mistake.{/cps}" + "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}I may have made a huge mistake." pause .5 "The loveseat to the left of me scrapes forward into my field of view." @@ -531,18 +544,18 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause .5 - "Fang’s father leans back,{w=.4} carefully examining and polishing a golf club." + "Fang’s father leans back, carefully examining and polishing a golf club." pause .5 "Maybe I can turn his trophies into a conversation piece." - "Extend an olive branch,{w=.4} so to speak." + "Extend an olive branch, so to speak." pause .5 A "What gun did you use to hunt these?" pause .5 - show fangdad happy with dissolve + show fangdad neutral with dissolve pause .5 FD "Gun?" @@ -551,8 +564,7 @@ label chapter_6: "My hands fold into my lap and I stare a million yards into the wall clock ahead of me." pause .5 - show fangdad neutral with Dissolve(.25) - FD "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} Anon,{w=.3} was it?" + FD "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps} Anon, was it?" FD "You a big fan of golf?" @@ -563,35 +575,39 @@ label chapter_6: A "I’ve played minigolf before{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 - FD "That’s a good start,{w=.3} a good start{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + FD "That’s a good start, a good start{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - FD "Nothing beats the real thing,{w=.2} though." + FD "Nothing beats the real thing, though." - FD "You ever play golf before,{w=.3} boy?" + FD "You ever play golf before, boy?" "Don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii golf" - A "N-{w=.1}no,{w=.3} not on a proper green before." + A "N-no, not on a proper green before." pause .5 "Nailed it." show fangdad happy with dissolve pause .5 - FD "Well,{w=.4} this is my favorite club right here.{w=.5} A 9 Iron." + FD "Well, this is my favorite club right here.{w=.4} A 9 Iron." "He finishes polishing the head of the club and rotates it ever so slightly so I see my reflection in the metal." pause .5 - FD "Now,{w=.3} Irons are by far the most common,{w=.3} and most useful out of your standard club set.{w=.6} Anywhere you need an extra{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.5} push,{w=.4} the Iron will do." + FD "Now, Irons are by far the most common, and most useful out of your standard club set." + + FD "Anywhere you need an extra{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} push{w=.4}, the Iron will do." - "His gaze makes its way from the club to me as he lays it across his lap.{w=.6} I gulp and sink back into the couch in an attempt to hide among the cushions." + "His gaze makes its way from the club to me as he lays it across his lap." + + "I gulp and sink back into the couch in an attempt to hide among the cushions." - FD "Of course,{w=.4} this is all due to the solid steel construction,{w=.4} and your own efforts." + FD "Of course, this is all due to the solid steel construction, and your own efforts." - FD "With the right quality club and technique,{w=.4} you can almost feel the ball {i}cleaving in twain{/i} when you strike it{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + FD "With the right quality club and technique, you can almost feel the ball {i}cleaving in twain{/i} when you strike it{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - FD "And I assure you,{w=.4} Anon,{w=.4} that my equipment is of the highest quality,{w=.6} and my technique is impeccable." + FD "And I assure you, Anon, that my equipment is of the highest quality, and my technique is impeccable." pause .5 show dimmer_darker behind fangdad: @@ -602,9 +618,9 @@ label chapter_6: ease_cubic 1.5 xalign 0.9 pause 1 show fangdad neutral flip with dissolve - "Fang’s father stands up,{w=.4} stepping on top of the sturdy coffee table.{w=.5} His club is lined up,{w=.3} and I can see my reflection in the impromptu ball." + "Fang’s father stands up, stepping on top of the sturdy coffee table. His club is lined up, and I can see my reflection in the impromptu ball." - "With well-practiced motions he demonstrates a perfect swing in the middle of a living room." + "With well-practiced motions he demonstrates a perfect swing in the middle of the living room." pause .5 show fangdad unimpressed flip: @@ -628,14 +644,14 @@ label chapter_6: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.0 pause .25 show fangdad happy with dissolve - "Fang’s father laughs heartily,{w=.4} setting the murder tool aside as he reclaims his throne." + "Fang’s father laughs heartily, setting the murder tool aside as he reclaims his throne." show naomi explanatory flip N "What fine form sir!" show naomi neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) pause .5 - stop music fadeout 4 + stop music fadeout 6 play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickpunch.ogg' show naser neutral flip show fangdad neutral: @@ -652,7 +668,7 @@ label chapter_6: easein 1 xalign -0.25 with dissolve - FM "How many times have I told you about intimidating suitors!{w=.5} This is the first boy our little Tooth Fairy has brought home!!" + FM "How many times have I told you about intimidating suitors! This is the first boy our little Tooth Fairy has brought home!!" pause .5 FD "What about Reed?" @@ -660,16 +676,15 @@ label chapter_6: "The father shrunk under the patented mother’s leer." pause .5 - FM "You know that boy isn’t right,{w=.3} dear." + FM "You know that boy isn’t right, dear." - "I feel a smidgen of sympathy,{w=.4} but keep quiet to avoid similar treatment from her." + "I feel a smidgen of sympathy, but keep quiet to avoid similar treatment from her." pause .5 - # TODO: review music choice? play music "audio/OST/punk_revamp.ogg" fadein 1.0 pause .5 - F "Oh my god Mom!{w=.5} Not in front of my friends!" + F "Oh my god Mom! Not in front of my friends!" show fangdad behind naser: easein 1 xalign 0.575 @@ -687,13 +702,13 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause .5 - "Fang is at the foot of the stairway,{w=.4} frustration clear on her face." + "Fang is at the foot of the stairway, frustration clear on her face." - "I look to Fang with hands clasp together,{w=.4} silently pleading." + "I look to Fang with hands clasp together, silently pleading." pause .5 show naomi explanatory flip - N "Oh!{w=.5} Are you ready for your date now?" + N "Oh! Are you ready for your date now?" pause .5 show fangmom: @@ -707,10 +722,10 @@ label chapter_6: "I lurch in my seat at that." - A "Ah,{w=.3} nah nah!{w=.4} {cps=*.4}We’re just-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" + A "Ah, nah nah!{w} {cps=*.4}We’re just-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" show fang shocked with Dissolve(.25) - F "N-{w=.2}no!{w=.5} We need to find a venue!" + F "N-no! We need to find a venue!" pause .5 FM "Just you two though?" @@ -718,21 +733,21 @@ label chapter_6: show fang unimpressed with dissolve - "Oh god no.{w=.5} Please,{w=.3} Raptor Jesus,{w=.4} I promise I’ll sacrifice a goat if you end this." + "Oh god no.{w=.4} Please, Raptor Jesus, I promise I’ll sacrifice a goat if you end this." pause .5 show naomi happy flip with Dissolve(.25) N "Why don’t we have a double date then!" show dimmer_light behind fang, fangmom, fangdad, naser, naomi with dissolve - "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}God,{w=.3} why have you abandoned me{cps=*.1}...?{/cps}" + "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}God, why have you abandoned me{cps=*.1}...?{/cps}" "Buddha be a bro please!" hide dimmer_light show naomi neutral flip with dissolve - FM "I agree!{w=.5} Naser and Naomi can accompany you!" + FM "I agree! Naser and Naomi can accompany you!" pause .5 show dimmer_darker behind fang, fangmom, fangdad, naser, naomi with Dissolve(.25) @@ -745,11 +760,11 @@ label chapter_6: "He looks me dead in the eyes." show fangdad unimpressed flip - FD "More people means you’re less likely to do something reckless,{w=.3} after all." + FD "More people means you’re less likely to do something reckless, after all." pause .5 show naser unimpressed flip - Nas "I dunno,{w=.4} I don’t think Fang would appreciate-" + Nas "I dunno, I don’t think Fang would appreciate-" show fangdad: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.8 @@ -767,7 +782,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang’s father puts his arm around Nasers’ shoulder and pulls him aside." pause .5 - FM "You’d love going with your brother,{w=.4} right Fang?" + FM "You’d love going with your brother, right Fang?" show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) F "Absolutely not." @@ -779,7 +794,7 @@ label chapter_6: show fangmom: easein 0.5 xalign 0.375 - FM "Come now,{w=.4} how many opportunities in your youth will you get to spend time all together like this?" + FM "Come now, how many opportunities in your youth will you get to spend time all together like this?" show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) F "Hopefully none." @@ -788,7 +803,7 @@ label chapter_6: ease 0.75 xalign 0.425 ease 0.75 xalign 0.375 repeat - FM "{cps=*.2}Aww,{/cps}{w=.3} but you used to {i}always{/i} spend time with little Naser{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + FM "{cps=*.2}Aww,{/cps} but you used to {i}always{/i} spend time with little Naser{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Her eyes gloss over again." pause .5 @@ -819,7 +834,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause 1 show naser explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Yes,{w=.3} I think a group date is an {w=.2}{i}excellent{/i}{w=.1} idea." + Nas "Yes, I think a group date is an {w=.2}{i}excellent{/i}{w=.1} idea." show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) @@ -858,7 +873,7 @@ label chapter_6: hide dimmer_light show fang considering - with Dissolve(.25) + with dissolve pause .5 F "Fffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffine." @@ -867,7 +882,7 @@ label chapter_6: show naomi neutral flip with dissolve - F "Let’s just get out of here,{w=.2} Anon." + F "Let’s just get out of here, Anon." pause .5 "Gladly." @@ -886,14 +901,16 @@ label chapter_6: "Naomi gives a little cheer and tugs the still catatonic Naser by the arm out the door." pause .5 - stop music fadeout 5 - scene black with fade + stop music fadeout 6 + scene black with Dissolve(1) + pause .5 "I give a polite goodbye to Fang’s Mother." "I extend a hand to Fang’s father and-" + pause .5 - "The eight bones of my palm are squeezed together,{w=.4} being ground into dust under the immense strength." + "The eight bones of my palm are squeezed together, being ground into dust under the immense strength." "The five bones joining my fingers to my palm threaten to splinter from the powerful grip." @@ -908,11 +925,11 @@ label chapter_6: play music "audio/OST/The Top of the Social Ladder.ogg" fadein 1.0 pause .5 - N "Come on,{w=.3} Naser!{w=.5} The day is still young!" + N "Come on, Naser! The day is still young!" - "Naser,{w=.4} still mentally fried,{w=.4} is being goaded by Naomi into driving to the city." + "Naser, still mentally fried, is being goaded by Naomi into driving to the city." - "Eventually,{w=.4} he robotically enters the driver's seat." + "Eventually, he robotically enters the driver's seat." pause .5 "Naomi ecstatically shoots into the shotgun seat." @@ -920,14 +937,14 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang and I take the back seats." pause .5 - scene nascar day with fade + scene nascar day with Dissolve(1) pause .5 - "Now that we’re getting this shitshow on the road,{w=.4} I should probably clarify with Fang about precisely what sort of venue she wants." + "Now that we’re getting this shitshow on the road, I should probably clarify with Fang about precisely what sort of venue she wants." "The split second I move my hand towards Fang to ask Naser chucks his jacket between us with lightning speed." - Nas "Whups,{w=.2} look out back there!{w=.4} Haha!" + Nas "{i}Whups{/i}, look out back there! Haha!" pause .5 "The look of pants-shitting fear on his face betrays his jovial tone." @@ -935,7 +952,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Poor guy." pause .5 - A "A-{w=.2}anyways,{w=.3} Fang." + A "A-anyways, Fang." "She looks over." @@ -952,7 +969,7 @@ label chapter_6: F "Preferably with a mosh pit." pause .5 - N "Oh,{w=.4} I know lots of places like that!" + N "Oh, I know lots of places like that!" A "Where?" @@ -963,7 +980,6 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 N "Why ever not?" - pause .5 F "I’m not going to play around the ritzy area." @@ -972,26 +988,27 @@ label chapter_6: "Naomi shrugs and turns back to Naser." pause .5 - N "In that case,{w=.4} we should just park in the middle of the city and work our way around." + N "In that case, we should just park in the middle of the city and work our way around." - F "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Sure.{w=.4} That’s fine." + F "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Sure. That’s fine." - N "What do you think,{w=.2} Anon?" + N "What do you think, Anon?" - "I look at Fang.{w=.4} She’s preoccupied with watching the buildings fly past us." + "I look at Fang. She’s preoccupied with watching the buildings fly past us." pause .5 "I shrug." - N "Alright then,{w=.4} to the city we go!" + N "Alright then, to the city we go!" + pause .5 - "Naomi turns the radio on,{w=.4} shattering my ears with the most nauseatingly upbeat love-song on max volume." + "Naomi turns the radio on, shattering my ears with the most nauseatingly upbeat love-song on max volume." "I’m left to retch as the song violates my virgin ears with it’s too-cheery tune." pause .5 - stop music fadeout 3 - play ambient 'audio/effects/city loop.ogg' fadein 4 + stop music fadeout 6 + play ambient 'audio/effects/city loop.ogg' fadein 6 scene sidewalk show anon neutral: xalign -0.15 yalign 0.1 @@ -1009,7 +1026,7 @@ label chapter_6: "The group slowly makes its way down the sidewalk." - "Naser walks ahead and continues to look back at me,{w=.4} his expression anxious and worried." + "Naser walks ahead and continues to look back at me, his expression anxious and worried." "Fang refuses to speak and gives everyone and everything a vicious sneer." @@ -1024,6 +1041,7 @@ label chapter_6: N "OH OH OH HOW ABOUT HERE!{w=.4} IT’S SO SPACIOUS AND THE FOOD IS TO DIE FOR-{w=.4} OOOOH I LOVE THAT RESTAURANT MAYBE WE CAN ASK THEM-{w=.4} OH AND THEN THERE’S THIS NICE CAFE AND THEY EVEN HAVE A PIANO-" "God this marmalade monster needs to die." + pause .5 N "OH.{w=.3} MY.{w=.3} GOSH!{w=.5} {nw}" show naomi: @@ -1033,7 +1051,7 @@ label chapter_6: extend "It’s PERFECT!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) - "Naomi stops the group before a large glass window.{w=.4} Past it is a large open room sparsely filled with miniscule round tables with candelabras set atop them." + "Naomi stops the group before a large glass window. Past it is a large open room sparsely filled with miniscule round tables with candelabras set atop them." pause .5 show naser neutral with Dissolve(.25) @@ -1056,7 +1074,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang looks unimpressed." show naomi explanatory flip - N "Come on,{w=.4} let’s go ask!" + N "Come on, let’s go ask!" show naomi neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) show naomi: @@ -1083,37 +1101,38 @@ label chapter_6: A "Ten dollars we get kicked out." show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) - F "No deal.{w=.5} You’re stating an inevitability,{w=.3} not a possibility." + F "No deal. You’re stating an inevitability, not a possibility." pause .5 stop ambient fadeout 3 show black with Dissolve(1) pause .5 - "We follow behind the pair to find Naomi pestering the Maitre D’ for possible arrangements,{w=.5} cringing as the poor man just stares off into the middle distance while Naomi prattles on obliviously." + "We follow behind the pair to find Naomi pestering the Maitre D’ for possible arrangements, cringing as the poor man just stares off into the middle distance while Naomi prattles on obliviously." N "-And if possible could you include maybe a dinner ticket option for-" - "The Maitre D’ looks towards us,{w=.4} or rather,{w=.2} Fang,{w=.5} and scowls." + "The Maitre D’ looks towards us, or rather Fang, and scowls." pause .5 - MaitD "Our esteemed establishment caters exclusively to those with an appreciation for fine culture,{w=.4} culinary and otherwise." + MaitD "Our esteemed establishment caters exclusively to those with an appreciation for fine culture, culinary and otherwise." - MaitD "Might I recommend that you vacate the premises at once,{w=.4} or will you be requiring an escort?" + MaitD "Might I recommend that you vacate the premises at once, or will you be requiring an escort?" pause .5 play ambient 'audio/effects/city loop.ogg' fadein 4 hide black show fang unimpressed - with Dissolve(1) + with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 A "Where’s my ten bucks?" show fang happy with Dissolve(.25) - F "Up your ass,{w=.4} I told you no deal." + F "Up your ass, I told you no deal." + pause .5 - "Naser tugs a bit at Naomi’s arm,{w=.4} and she stomps back to the entrance in a huff with him following." + "Naser tugs a bit at Naomi’s arm, and she stomps back to the entrance in a huff with him following." show naomi unimpressed flip: yalign 0.0 xalign 1.2 @@ -1127,40 +1146,41 @@ label chapter_6: pause 1 show naomi angry flip with Dissolve(.25) - N "Hmph!{w=.4} Fang,{w=.3} I’ve decided this place isn’t good enough!" + N "Hmph!{w=.4} Fang, I’ve decided this place isn’t good enough!" pause .5 "Sure." show naser considering flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Don’t be mad Naomi,{w=.4} he isn’t worth getting upset about." + Nas "Don’t be mad Naomi, he isn’t worth getting upset about." show naser neutral behind naomi show naomi unimpressed with dissolve pause .5 - F "Nah,{w=.4} he’s worth it.{w=.5} If it were me and the band they’d have one less tire on all their cars." + F "Nah, he’s worth it. If it were me and the band they’d have one less tire on all their cars." show naser unimpressed flip with dissolve "Naser raises an eyebrow back at Fang." - pause .5 show fang: easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.05 show fang flip off happy with dissolve "She responds with a smirk and a middle finger." - pause .5 + pause 1 - stop ambient fadeout 4 + stop ambient fadeout 6 - scene black with Dissolve(1) + scene black with Dissolve(1.5) + pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - - pause 1 + pause .5 play music "audio/OST/Summertime Synth.ogg" fadein 1.0 + pause 1 + scene skinrow show anon neutral: xalign -0.15 yalign 0.1 @@ -1175,23 +1195,23 @@ label chapter_6: "We’ve been searching for a place for at least two hours now." - "Fang is barely holding herself together,{w=.4} judging from her angry muttering." + "Fang is barely holding herself together, judging from her angry muttering." pause .5 - "A lot of muttering.{w=.4} Mostly including words like murder,{w=.4} knives,{w=.4} and particular genitals as pin cushions,{w=.4} with profanity taking up a good half of what escaped her beak." + "A lot of muttering. Mostly including words like murder, knives, and particular genitals as pin cushions, with profanity taking up a good half of what escaped her beak." - "I could see a blood vessel throbbing on her temple.{w=.5} This didn’t look good." + "I could see a blood vessel throbbing on her temple. This didn’t look good." pause .5 - "I position myself slightly behind Fang,{w=.4} putting her between me and Naomi." + "I position myself slightly behind Fang, putting her between me and Naomi." pause .5 - A "Hey Naomi,{w=.4} I got an idea!" + A "Hey Naomi, I got an idea!" show naomi: easein_cubic 1 xalign .65 show naomi explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25) - "Naomi spins on her heel towards the sound of my voice,{w=.4} and the giant grin on her stupid snout stiffens as she sees Fang’s looming aneurysm." + "Naomi spins on her heel towards the sound of my voice, and the giant grin on her stupid snout stiffens as she sees Fang’s looming aneurysm." pause .25 show naomi considering flip with Dissolve(.25) @@ -1202,6 +1222,7 @@ label chapter_6: "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Luckily there’s a small park nearby." + pause .5 scene park show naser neutral: @@ -1217,12 +1238,12 @@ label chapter_6: "The four of us grab some drinks from a vending machine." - "Fang and I grab a knockoff brand of soda,{w=.4} Naomi got a bottle of water,{w=.4} and Naser bought a sports drink." + "Fang and I grab a knockoff brand of soda, Naomi got a bottle of water, and Naser bought a sports drink." pause .5 - "We’re lucky to find an unoccupied picnic table with some shade,{w=.4} because the afternoon sun has turned the cool day into a sweltering hot one." + "We’re lucky to find an unoccupied picnic table with some shade, because the afternoon sun has turned the cool day into a sweltering hot one." - "Thank you,{w=.4} coastal weather." + "Thank you, coastal weather." pause .5 "We sit in near silence aside from Naser's audible chugging of his sports drink." @@ -1241,11 +1262,11 @@ label chapter_6: show anon neutral flip show naomi happy with Dissolve(.25) - N "Great shot,{w=.3} Naser!" + N "Great shot, Naser!" show naomi neutral show naser happy flip with dissolve - Nas "Of course it was,{w=.2} babe." + Nas "Of course it was, babe." "Fang mock retches into the grass." pause .25 @@ -1253,13 +1274,13 @@ label chapter_6: show naser considering flip show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "At any rate,{w=.4} I need to drain the snake." + Nas "At any rate, I need to drain the snake." pause .5 "What." pause .5 - "Naser turns and gives a brief wave back to us,{w=.4} and makes his way to the public restroom on the other side of the park." + "Naser turns and gives a brief wave back to us, and makes his way to the public restroom on the other side of the park." show naser neutral flip with dissolve show naser: @@ -1268,7 +1289,7 @@ label chapter_6: hide naser with dissolve pause 1 - N "Aww,{w=.4} his double-entendres are always so clever!" + N "Aww, his double-entendres are always so clever!" "Fang slaps a hand over her eyes." pause .5 @@ -1276,7 +1297,7 @@ label chapter_6: show fang considering flip with Dissolve(.25) F "I need to go too." - N "Why?{w=.4} Something the matter?" + N "Why? Something the matter?" show fang unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) F "Monthly problems." @@ -1286,9 +1307,9 @@ label chapter_6: N "I have some extras stocked!" - N "I have regular,{w=.25} plastic,{w=.25} scented{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + N "I have regular, plastic, scented{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - N "Oh,{w=.4} {cps=*.5}what diameter do-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" + N "Oh, {cps=*.5}what diameter do-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" show fang angry flip F "Shut up now." @@ -1302,16 +1323,16 @@ label chapter_6: pause .2 show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) hide fang with dissolve - "Fang stomps away to the bathroom,{w=.4} leaving just the apricot asspain{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "Fang stomps away to the bathroom, leaving just the apricot asspain{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoornatureloop.ogg' fadein 4 - stop music fadeout 4 + play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoornatureloop.ogg' fadein 6 + stop music fadeout 6 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}And me." show naomi neutral with dissolve pause .25 - N "Do you need to use the restroom as well,{w=.2} Anon?" + N "Do you need to use the restroom as well, Anon?" pause .5 "How tempting." @@ -1322,7 +1343,7 @@ label chapter_6: stop ambient fadeout 3 show naomi explanatory - N "Since it’s just the two of us,{w=.4} I’ve been wanting to ask for a while." + N "Since it’s just the two of us, I’ve been wanting to ask for a while." N "How have things been going with Fang?{w=.4} Has she been well?{w=.4} Is there anything wrong?" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) @@ -1331,7 +1352,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "Shouldn’t Naser know?" show naomi considering - N "Yes,{w=.4} Naser knows,{w=.4} but I figure I’d ask you as well." + N "Yes, Naser knows, but I figure I’d ask you as well." show naomi neutral N "Since the two of you spend so much time together and all." @@ -1340,17 +1361,17 @@ label chapter_6: show naomi sad with Dissolve(.25) N "I hear Naser talking all the time about how worried he is for Fang." - N "He’s such a good brother,{w=.4} isn’t he?" + N "He’s such a good brother, isn’t he?" pause .5 "I’m just going to start filtering her." pause .5 - N "I just get so worried for her sometimes,{w=.2} too." + N "I just get so worried for her sometimes, too." - N "Fang can just be so anti-social,{w=.4} you know?" + N "Fang can just be so anti-social, you know?" - N "And she’s always avoiding me,{w=.3} too." + N "And she’s always avoiding me." pause .5 N "I never can get a read on how she feels." @@ -1369,7 +1390,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "How’d you know about how Fang felt sad a month ago?" show naomi explanatory - N "Oh,{w=.4} Naser told me!" + N "Oh, Naser told me!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -1385,10 +1406,10 @@ label chapter_6: A "You keep on dodging that question." show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) - N "Hm?{w=.4} What am I dodging?" + N "Hm? What am I dodging?" pause .5 - A "Fang clearly doesn’t like you,{w=.4} you say so yourself." + A "Fang clearly doesn’t like you, you say so yourself." A "Yet you keep asking me about her." @@ -1397,10 +1418,10 @@ label chapter_6: A "Fang is his sister after all." show naomi explanatory with Dissolve(.25) - N "O-{w=.2}of course!{w=.4} It’s just I’d like to hear from you about her!" + N "O-of course! It’s just I’d like to hear from you about her!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) - A "Why me though?{w=.5} I don’t know anything about her,{w=.3} Naser knows Fang way better than I do." + A "Why me though? I don’t know anything about her, Naser knows Fang way better than I do." show naomi: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.0 @@ -1415,13 +1436,13 @@ label chapter_6: show naomi considering with dissolve "Naomi’s pupils dilate and her eyes dance away from me." - N "In fact,{w=.4} you two make the cutest couple.{w=.6} {cps=*.3}Hahaha.{/cps}" + N "In fact, you two make the cutest couple. {cps=*.3}Hahaha.{/cps}" pause .5 "It’s the first time Naomi’s looked anything other than happy." - stop music fadeout 4 - play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoornatureloop.ogg' fadein 5 + stop music fadeout 6 + play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoornatureloop.ogg' fadein 6 pause 1 A "Are you up to something?" @@ -1436,6 +1457,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "Because you’re not making any sense." show naomi considering with dissolve + pause .5 A "Naser knows her better than anyone else." @@ -1463,7 +1485,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .25 N "Because Naser wants to make Fang happy! {w=.7}{nw}" show naomi considering - extend "A-{w=.2}and so do I,{w=.2} of course!{w=.4} Ahahahaha!" + extend "A-and so do I, of course! Ahahahaha!" play music "audio/OST/sadist.ogg" fadein 1 pause .5 @@ -1471,11 +1493,13 @@ label chapter_6: show anon neutral flip with dissolve pause .5 - "Naomi’s laugh is hollow.{w=.6} Her eyes shifting side to side." + "Naomi’s laugh is hollow." + + "Her eyes shifting side to side." pause .5 show naomi explanatory with Dissolve(.25) - N "I was only doing what I thought was best for both her and you,{w=.3} Anon." + N "I was only doing what I thought was best for both her and you, Anon." show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) pause .25 @@ -1485,7 +1509,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show naomi explanatory - N "The first time I saw you,{w=.4} sitting on your own on that dirty old bench." + N "The first time I saw you, sitting on your own on that dirty old bench." N "You looked like you needed someone to lean on." show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) @@ -1506,31 +1530,31 @@ label chapter_6: A "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"...?\"{/i}{/alpha}" - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"If there’s anything Fang needs in these trying times,{w=.4} it’s a new friend to talk to!\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"If there’s anything Fang needs in these trying times, it’s a new friend to talk to!\"{/i}{/alpha}" pause .5 "{cps=*.3}This entire time.{/cps}" pause .5 # TODO: this dialogue doesn't appear to have made the final cut in previous chapters - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Wasn't that Naser's sister?{w=.4} How wonderful that you're making friends,{w=.2} Anon!\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Wasn't that Naser's sister?{w=.4} How wonderful that you're making friends, Anon!\"{/i}{/alpha}" N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Tell me everything!{w=.4} What were you and Fang talking about?\"{/i}{/alpha}" N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I wanna know all about it!\"{/i}{/alpha}" pause .5 - "{i}Fuck{/i},{w=.5} how didn’t I notice?" + "{i}Fuck{/i}, how didn’t I notice?" pause .5 # TODO: as above - "{alpha=0.75}{i}Naomi places a finger on her chin(?) for a moment and stares into space.{w=.5} Suddenly,{w=.4} her face lights up.{/i}{/alpha}" + "{alpha=0.75}{i}Naomi places a finger on her chin(?) for a moment and stares into space. Suddenly, her face lights up.{/i}{/alpha}" - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Oh!{w=.4} What if you asked Fang for help?{w=.5} I’m sure she’d lend a hand!\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Oh! What if you asked Fang for help?{w=.4} I’m sure she’d lend a hand!\"{/i}{/alpha}" - A "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I dunno{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} she’s usually busy with her own work,{w=.4} and I don’t want to bother her more than I already do every day.\"{/i}{/alpha}" + A "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I dunno{cps=*.1}...{/cps} she’s usually busy with her own work, and I don’t want to bother her more than I already do every day.\"{/i}{/alpha}" - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"It can’t hurt to ask,{w=.2} though,{w=.4} right?{w=.6} Just a thought.\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"It can’t hurt to ask, though,right?{w=.4} Just a thought.\"{/i}{/alpha}" pause .5 "{cps=*.3}That fucking{/cps}{w=.2} {i}bitch{/i}." @@ -1546,7 +1570,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show naomi explanatory - N "Uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} Anon?{w=.5} You’ve been spacing out." + N "Uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} Anon? You’ve been spacing out." show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) pause .5 @@ -1566,7 +1590,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Did I miss something?" pause .5 - "I look to Naser,{w=.4} who’s completely clueless to what Naomi has been doing for the past month." + "I look to Naser, who’s completely clueless to what Naomi has been doing for the past month." "Just like I was." pause .5 @@ -1579,14 +1603,13 @@ label chapter_6: "Fitting that the moral compass has a literal compass for a head." pause .5 + stop music fadeout 8 "I’m part of someone else’s plan." "Nothing I’ve done in the last several months was a conclusion reached on my own." - pause .5 + pause 1 "Are my feelings for Fang also just a tool for Naomi?" - - stop music fadeout 6 pause .5 "What do I even do here?" @@ -1606,14 +1629,14 @@ label chapter_6: "I need to get away from here,{w=.4} fast." play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoornatureloop.ogg' fadein 4 hide dimmer_darker with dissolve - pause .25 + pause .5 - A "Actually,{w=.4} I need to use the bathroom myself now." + A "Actually, I need to use the bathroom myself now." show naomi explanatory show naser neutral with Dissolve(.25) - N "Oh,{w=.3} sure!{w=.5} We’ll be here!" + N "Oh, sure! We’ll be here!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) pause .25 @@ -1624,18 +1647,18 @@ label chapter_6: easeout_cubic 1 xalign 1.3 pause .75 - Nas "ANON.{w=.5} WAIT!" + Nas "ANON.{w=.4} WAIT!" "I freeze in place." pause .5 show naser unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Fair warning,{w=.4} watch the ceiling." + Nas "Fair warning, watch the ceiling." pause .5 "I sense great tragedy in those words{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - "Whatever.{w=.4} I don’t want to be here." + "Whatever. I don’t want to be here." pause .5 stop ambient fadeout 4 @@ -1654,15 +1677,15 @@ label chapter_6: scene bathroom1 with Dissolve(1) pause .5 - "The public restroom looks clean enough from the outside,{w=.4} but I can see through the open doors that it gets cleaned maybe once a week." + "The public restroom looks clean enough from the outside, but I can see through the open doors that it gets cleaned maybe once a week." "I’m not here to use the restroom anyways." pause .5 - "If I’m right,{w=.3} I just need to look behind the building,{w=.4} and{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "If I’m right, I just need to look behind the building, and{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - scene bathroom2 with Dissolve(.25) - pause .5 + scene bathroom2 with dissolve + pause 1 "Jackpot." @@ -1675,15 +1698,15 @@ label chapter_6: stop ambient fadeout 3 play music "audio/OST/That Monochromatic Weirdo.ogg" fadein 1.0 scene bathroom3 with dissolve - pause 1 + pause 1.5 - "She shrugs half-heartedly,{w=.4} holding out the half-smoked sin-stick to me." + "She shrugs half-heartedly, holding out the half-smoked sin-stick to me." pause .5 "I hesitate." pause .5 - "Fang tilts her head.{w=.6} Before she can pull her hand back I accept the smoke." + "Fang tilts her head. Before she can pull her hand back I accept the smoke." pause .5 scene bathroom4 with dissolve @@ -1694,9 +1717,9 @@ label chapter_6: "‘It’s not an indirect kiss or anything like that’ I chant as a mantra." pause .5 - "The drag is smooth,{w=.4} with the hint of mint to it." + "The drag is smooth, with the hint of mint to it." - "The smoke exhaled is wispy,{w=.4} and I can feel my skin prickle." + "The smoke exhaled is wispy, and I can feel my skin prickle." "I don’t know whether it’s because of the nicotine or whose lips I tasted." pause .5 @@ -1711,12 +1734,12 @@ label chapter_6: F "Mmm{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - "Fang’s tail drums a steady rhythm on the wall as she takes one last,{w=.3} long drag." + "Fang’s tail drums a steady rhythm on the wall as she takes one last, long drag." "She blows out a heavier cloud and drops the stump on the ground." pause .5 - "I stamp on the stub before she can,{w=.4} giving it a solid twist before kicking the dead end into the grass." + "I stamp on the stub before she can, giving it a solid twist before kicking the dead end into the grass." pause .5 F "How’d you find me?" @@ -1730,16 +1753,19 @@ label chapter_6: "She gives a brief shrug." pause .5 - A "Anyways,{w=.4} we could probably get away with ditching Naser and Naomi." + A "Anyways, we could probably get away with ditching Naser and Naomi." F "How’d you manage that?" A "Secret family technique." + pause .5 F "Pssh." pause .5 - "Suddenly an image of Fang’s dad pops in my mind and I realize I probably shouldn’t be seen alone with her behind a public restroom,{w=.6} under penalty of ‘holy shit my spleen is outside my body’." + "Suddenly an image of Fang’s dad pops in my mind and I realize I probably shouldn’t be seen alone with her behind a public restroom" + + "Under penalty of ‘holy shit my spleen is outside my body’." pause .5 A "Let’s get out of here." @@ -1747,7 +1773,7 @@ label chapter_6: F "Alright.{w=.4} Let’s get a move on." pause .5 - scene bathroom6 with dissolve + scene bathroom6 with Dissolve(1) pause .5 "The two of us peek from behind the building to make sure the coast is clear of any brothers or scheming persimmon piranhas." @@ -1755,17 +1781,16 @@ label chapter_6: "The coast is clear." pause .5 - # TODO: scene sidewalk F "I think I know where to look." A "Please tell me it’s not in this shitty Promenade place." - F "Nah,{w=.4} it’s in Lil' Tru." + F "Nah, it’s in Lil' Tru." A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Where?" - F "Little Troodon.{w=.4} It’s near enough that we can walk there." + F "Little Troodon. It’s near enough that we can walk there." A "Why didn’t you mention it before?" @@ -1780,8 +1805,9 @@ label chapter_6: "The two of us sprint conspicuously across the park to the nearest cover in the concrete jungle." stop music fadeout 4 - pause 1 + pause 1.5 scene black with Dissolve(1) + pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 @@ -1811,7 +1837,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show naser explanatory flip with dissolve - Nas "Hey,{w=.2} Naomi,{w=.4} did you know that thirteen percent of public restrooms{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Nas "Hey, Naomi, did you know that thirteen percent of public restrooms{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Naser babbles with Naomi while we wait for Fang to return." pause .5 @@ -1827,26 +1853,26 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause 1 - F "Alright,{w=.4} I’m done taking a dump or whatever." + F "Alright, I’m done taking a dump or whatever." F "Let’s go." show naser neutral with dissolve - Nas "Wait{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} why do you smell like smoke?" + Nas "Wait{cps=*.1}...{/cps} why do you smell like smoke?" show fang considering flip with Dissolve(.25) - F "Uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} I went to hong kong for a bit.{w=.4} Let’s go." + F "Uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I went to hong kong for a bit. Let’s go." show naser unimpressed - Nas "You know you aren’t supposed to be smoking,{w=.3} Fang." + Nas "You know you aren’t supposed to be smoking, Fang." show fang unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) - F "Just drop it,{w=.3} dork." + F "Just drop it, dork." F "You don’t see me bringing up that leopard mankini you have in your closet." pause .5 - show naser annoyed + show naser surprised show naomi: easein 1 xalign -0.125 show naomi shocked @@ -1860,7 +1886,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "That the only thing in the closet?" show fang happy flip with Dissolve(.25) - F "Oh,{w=.3} of fucking course not." + F "Oh, of fucking course not." F "{cps=*.6}He’s also got this pink-{/cps}{w=.5}{nw}" @@ -1868,12 +1894,13 @@ label chapter_6: show naser shocked: easein_elastic 1 xalign 0.05 Nas "I’M GOING TO STOP YOU {i}RIGHT THERE{/i}.{fast}" with vpunch + pause .5 - show naser explanatory with Dissolve(.25) + show naser explanatory with dissolve N "Why don’t we continue on now!" pause .5 - "Naomi is holding a handkerchief to her nose,{w=.4} with a prominent splotch of red that’s steadily growing." + "Naomi is holding a handkerchief to her nose, with a prominent splotch of red that’s steadily growing." show fang neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) F "Fffffffffffffffffffffffffffiiiiinally." @@ -1897,14 +1924,14 @@ label chapter_6: "Not even ten minutes later and we’re back where we started." show naomi happy with dissolve - N "-isn’t this one perfect!{w=.4} The stage is so well lit and-" + N "-isn’t this one perfect! The stage is so well lit and-" show fang angry with Dissolve(.25) "Fang seems seconds away from successful recreation of Jing Ke’s assassination of King Zheng." - "I know it’s wrong to poke a hornet’s nest,{w=.4} but{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "I know it’s wrong to poke a hornet’s nest, but{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - A "Fang,{w=.3} you alright?" + A "Fang, you alright?" pause .5 F "I hate everyone here." @@ -1919,12 +1946,12 @@ label chapter_6: "I should ask Naser to just split off for a while{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - "Naomi would back me up if I can convince her I’m taking Fang out on a d-{w=.6}EVENT." + "Naomi would back me up if I can convince her I’m taking Fang out on a d-{w=.4}EVENT." - "I really don’t want Naomi’s help,{w=.3} though." + "I really don’t want Naomi’s help, though." pause .5 - "I could get Fang to ask Naser to break off,{w=.4} but uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "I could get Fang to ask Naser to break off, but uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "She’s on the verge of fratricide too right now." pause .5 @@ -1935,15 +1962,15 @@ label chapter_6: show naomi neutral show naser considering with dissolve - Nas "Hey,{w=.2} Anon,{w=.4} you alright?" + Nas "Hey, Anon, you alright?" A "Hm?" Nas "You’ve got this intense look on you." - A "Oh,{w=.3} sorry." + A "Oh, sorry." - A "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} trying to think of good places." + A "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} trying to think of good places." pause .5 stop ambient fadeout 3 @@ -1963,7 +1990,7 @@ label chapter_6: label .AskNaser: - A "Actually,{w=.3} Naser." + A "Actually, Naser." Nas "Hm?" @@ -1991,7 +2018,7 @@ label chapter_6: easein 1 xalign 1.0 show naser explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Ha,{w=.4} you’re funny." + Nas "Ha, you’re funny." "Naser’s brow grows slick with sweat." pause .5 @@ -2006,7 +2033,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "You know she doesn’t get along with Naomi." show naser neutral flip with dissolve - "His eyes shift back,{w=.4} catching sight of Fang’s poorly withheld anger." + "His eyes shift back, catching sight of Fang’s poorly withheld anger." pause .5 show naser sad flip with Dissolve(.25) @@ -2014,7 +2041,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "It’s only a matter of time before things go nuclear." - A "And as much as I’d find a catfight amusing,{w=.4} neither of us want to see Fang and Naomi duke it out." + A "And as much as I’d find a catfight amusing, neither of us want to see Fang and Naomi duke it out." show naser considering flip with Dissolve(.25) Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -2048,7 +2075,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Naomi has circled around behind us and pokes her head between Naser and I." pause .5 - Nas "Don’t worry about it,{w=.2} babe." + Nas "Don’t worry about it, babe." Nas "Anon just wanted to split the group for a bit." @@ -2097,7 +2124,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show naomi explanatory - N "Still,{w=.4} despite his looks,{w=.3} the Anon I know won’t end up doing anything weird!" + N "Still, despite his looks, the Anon I know won’t end up doing anything weird!" show naomi neutral show naser neutral flip @@ -2111,14 +2138,14 @@ label chapter_6: pause .25 show naser unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}You promise to not make it weird or anything,{w=.4} right?" + Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}You promise to not make it weird or anything, right?" - A "I-{w=.2}I{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} What?{w=.4} Whatever,{w=.4} no,{w=.2} of course not." + A "I-I{cps=*.1}...{/cps} What?{w=.4} Whatever, no, of course not." show naomi happy with Dissolve(.25) N "Seems it’s settled then!" - N "Come on,{w=.2} Naser!{w=.4} We’ll go look on the east side of town!" + N "Come on, Naser! We’ll go look on the east side of town!" show naomi neutral show naser considering flip @@ -2127,7 +2154,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Alright{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "I trust you,{w=.2} Anon." + Nas "I trust you, Anon." hide dimmer_lighter with dissolve show naser behind naomi @@ -2155,12 +2182,12 @@ label chapter_6: F "What were the three of you huddling about?" show anon neutral flip with dissolve - "Fang was walking behind us this whole time?{w=.5} I didn’t notice." + "Fang was walking behind us this whole time? I didn’t notice." - A "Oh,{w=.3} I was just getting rid of them." + A "Oh, I was just getting rid of them." show fang happy with dissolve - F "Oh,{w=.4} man,{w=.2} you’re a lifesaver." + F "Oh, man, you’re a lifesaver." A "Seems like it was either this or someone ends up with a black eye." pause .5 @@ -2180,7 +2207,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Alright{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser neutral with dissolve - "He looks ahead again,{w=.4} paying great attention to Naomi’s spergery." + "He looks ahead again, paying great attention to Naomi’s spergery." pause .5 "I turn to Fang again." @@ -2188,7 +2215,7 @@ label chapter_6: show anon neutral flip with dissolve pause .25 - A "Hey,{w=.3} if you don’t want to stay in a group,{w=.4} why don’t you ask Naser to split off for a while?" + A "Hey, if you don’t want to stay in a group, why don’t you ask Naser to split off for a while?" show fang considering with dissolve pause .25 @@ -2210,12 +2237,12 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - F "Ehh,{w=.4} might as well try." + F "Ehh, might as well try." stop music fadeout 4 play ambient 'audio/effects/city loop.ogg' fadein 5 show fang happy with dissolve - F "Hey,{w=.4} Stephen Ha-{w=.15}Wing!" + F "Hey, Stephen Ha-Wing!" A "Wait,{w=.3} {cps=*.5}that’s not how-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" @@ -2232,6 +2259,7 @@ label chapter_6: F "Me and her just aren’t going to get along." F "And it’d cover more ground." + pause .5 "Naser slows down a bit." @@ -2242,9 +2270,9 @@ label chapter_6: show anon behind naser show naser explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} don’t think that’s a great idea." + Nas "I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} don’t think that’s a great idea." - Nas "We should stick together,{w=.4} right Naomi?" + Nas "We should stick together, right Naomi?" show naomi considering flip with dissolve pause .25 @@ -2260,9 +2288,9 @@ label chapter_6: show naomi keikaku flip with dissolve pause .25 - N "I think it’s a {i}wonderful{/i} idea,{w=.4} we can check in the Promenade!{w=.5} Oh I know this wonderful cafe and-" + N "I think it’s a {i}wonderful{/i} idea,{w=.4} we can check in the Promenade! Oh I know this wonderful cafe and-" - F "Great.{w=.4} Now fuck off." + F "Great. Now fuck off." stop ambient fadeout 2 play music 'audio/ost/bayside bumming it.ogg' pause .5 @@ -2278,7 +2306,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Dad said he’ll do to {i}me{/i} anything that you do to Fang!" pause .5 - "Anon Fang & Naomi" "{cps=*.3}...What...{/cps}" + "Anon Fang & Naomi" "{cps=*.25}...What...{/cps}" # F "...What..." # A "...What..." @@ -2286,7 +2314,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 - Nas "Fang,{w=.3} you gotta promise to not let Anon do anything creepy." + Nas "Fang, you gotta promise to not let Anon do anything creepy." pause .5 show askfang2 with Dissolve(.25) @@ -2358,7 +2386,7 @@ label chapter_6: show naser sad with dissolve hide naser with dissolve - "With that Naser and Naomi leave,{w=.4} turning the corner onto another street." + "With that Naser and Naomi leave, turning the corner onto another street." show anon neutral with dissolve jump .postAsking @@ -2372,6 +2400,7 @@ label chapter_6: "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Now it’s just the two of us." + pause .5 "Alone." @@ -2394,40 +2423,40 @@ label chapter_6: A "Got a spare?" - "She shrugs half-heartedly,{w=.4} holding out the pack to me." + "She shrugs half-heartedly, holding out the pack to me." "There’s one left." "I hesitate." pause .5 - "Fang tilts her head.{w=.5} Before she can pull her hand back I accept the last smoke." + "Fang tilts her head. Before she can pull her hand back I accept the last smoke." pause .5 - "I bring the butt to my lips,{w=.4} feeling the pod within the filter." + "I bring the butt to my lips, feeling the pod within the filter." A "Figures you smoke menthols." - F "Oh shut up.{w=.5} And you better share,{w=.4} I don’t think I’ll be getting a fresh pack any time soon." + F "Oh shut up. And you better share, I don’t think I’ll be getting a fresh pack any time soon." - "She hands me her lighter,{w=.4} a little cheap pink Bic." + "She hands me her lighter, a little cheap pink Bic." pause .5 - "It’s quick and easy,{w=.4} no wind to worry about as my thumb rolls over the top and the tiny ember of a flame sears the end of the cigarette." + "It’s quick and easy, no wind to worry about as my thumb rolls over the top and the tiny ember of a flame sears the end of the cigarette." "I pop the pod with my incisor and pull in slowly." - "The draw is smooth,{w=.4} with a hint of mint to it." + "The draw is smooth, with a hint of mint to it." pause .5 "The cherry at the end burns dimly as I tap off the ash." - "The smoke exhaled is wispy,{w=.4} and I can feel my nerves ease." + "The smoke exhaled is wispy, and I can feel my nerves ease." pause .5 - F "Ha,{w=.4} pussy." + F "Ha, pussy." - A "It’s your last one,{w=.4} wanna savor it." + A "It’s your last one, wanna savor it." "I hand her back the cigarette." @@ -2436,9 +2465,9 @@ label chapter_6: scene troodonconvergence2 with dissolve pause .5 - "Her drag is harsher,{w=.4} burning up twice the amount." + "Her drag is harsher, burning up twice the amount." - "She blows out hazy rings,{w=.4} one after another,{w=.4} as if signaling an indigenous Raptor tribe." + "She blows out hazy rings, one after another, as if signaling an indigenous Raptor tribe." pause .5 A "Trying to show off now?" @@ -2450,16 +2479,16 @@ label chapter_6: A "You trigga-lipped it." - F "It’s still good,{w=.2} man." + F "It’s still good, man." scene troodonconvergence3 with dissolve pause .5 "The filter feels moist between my index and middle knuckles." - "I bring the smoke back to my lips,{w=.4} trying to ignore the wetness of it." + "I bring the smoke back to my lips, trying to ignore the wetness of it." - "I draw in even more,{w=.4} burning up another quarter of it." + "I draw in even more, burning up another quarter of it." pause .5 "I can feel my skin prickle as I exhale a thicker fog." @@ -2470,9 +2499,9 @@ label chapter_6: "Fuck." pause .5 - F "Ha,{w=.4} called it." + F "Ha, called it." - A "Mmm.{w=.4} Yeah,{w=.2} I can’t." + A "Mmm. Yeah, I can’t." scene troodonconvergence4 with dissolve pause .5 @@ -2496,11 +2525,11 @@ label chapter_6: A "Please tell me it’s not in this shitty Promenade place." - F "Nah,{w=.4} it’s Lil' Tru." + F "Nah, it’s Lil' Tru." A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Where?" - F "Little Troodon.{w=.4} It’s near enough that we can walk there." + F "Little Troodon. It’s near enough that we can walk there." A "Why didn’t you mention it before?" @@ -2511,7 +2540,7 @@ label chapter_6: stop music fadeout 4 - "Fang leads the way,{w=.4} navigating us away from this overly expensive part of town." + "Fang leads the way, navigating us away from this overly expensive part of town." pause .5 scene black with Fade(1, 0, 0) @@ -2527,14 +2556,14 @@ label chapter_6: yalign 0.1 xalign 0.3 show fang neutral behind anon: yalign 0.0 xalign 0.9 - with Dissolve(1) + with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 "Little Troodon is completely unlike the rest of the city." - "Instead of skyscrapers and glass buildings,{w=.4} the whole place is a series of interconnected alleyways forming a plaza." + "Instead of skyscrapers and glass buildings, the whole place is a series of interconnected alleyways forming a plaza." - "Mostly booths for scamming vendors,{w=.4} but every now and then an actual building can be seen." + "Mostly booths for scamming vendors, but every now and then an actual building can be seen." "Countless salesmen call out to Fang and I." @@ -2554,11 +2583,13 @@ label chapter_6: show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) F "Good eye." - A "Living in the ass-end of this place,{w=.4} I’ve picked up a thing or two." + A "Living in the ass-end of this place, I’ve picked up a thing or two." pause .5 $ renpy.music.set_volume(0, 3, 'ambient') - show black with dissolve + show black with Dissolve(1) + pause .5 + "The two of us check the sparsely located buildings one by one." "I make sure to mark down the foreign swears in a notepad to look up later." @@ -2569,7 +2600,7 @@ label chapter_6: $ renpy.music.set_volume(1, 3, 'ambient') show fang unimpressed - hide black with dissolve + hide black with Dissolve(1) pause .5 F "Can’t believe we’re still looking." @@ -2581,27 +2612,30 @@ label chapter_6: show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) F "Fuck him{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} callin’ me a meteor dodger{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} fucking prick." + pause .5 - A "Still,{w=.4} we must have checked dozens of places by now." + A "Still, we must have checked dozens of places by now." A "But why won’t anyone have a band?" - stop ambient fadeout 4 + stop ambient fadeout 6 play music "audio/OST/she_fucks_human_men.ogg" fadein 1.0 pause .5 - unknown "{cps=*.6}Her Reputation,{w=.3} it does so Precede her.{/cps}" + unknown "{cps=*.6}Her Reputation,{w=.4} it does so Precede her.{/cps}" show fang angry with Dissolve(.25) "Fang’s pupils contract." + show anon sad with dissolve "Not this again." pause .5 show fang: easein_back 0.5 xalign 1.0 - F "{b}HER{/b}?!?!{w=.6} You people are all the same!{w=.4} Thinking that you have to go off-" + F "{b}HER{/b}?!?!{w=.4} You people are all the same!{w=.4} Thinking that you have to go off-" + show anon neutral with Dissolve(.25) A "Fang!" show fang angry flip: @@ -2621,7 +2655,7 @@ label chapter_6: unknown "Everyone here,{w=.3} knows of her,{w=.4} especially of her family." show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - F "A full platter!{w=.5} Stacks high!" + F "A full platter! Stacks high!" pause .5 show fritatta: @@ -2629,10 +2663,10 @@ label chapter_6: show fritatta: easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.1 with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 "I look at the{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - pause .5 + pause 1 "What the fuck am I looking at?!" @@ -2651,11 +2685,11 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show fang surprised with Dissolve(.25) - F "Wait,{w=.3} you know a venue?{w=.5 } Where?!" + F "Wait, you know a venue? Where?!" - unknown "But first,{w=.3} the Ritual,{w=.3} that must be Conducted." + unknown "But first,{w=.4} the Ritual,{w=.3} that must be Conducted." - "Finally,{w=.4} progress." + "Finally, progress." show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) F "No way!" @@ -2673,23 +2707,26 @@ label chapter_6: unknown "For as long,{w=.3} as I can stand to hold it." - unknown "And to the victorious,{w=.3} my own artifact holding me to this flimsy visage,{w=.3} a Phone Roomba." - pause .5 + unknown "And to the victorious,{w=.3} my own artifact holding me to this flimsy visage{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + + unknown "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}A Phone Roomba." + pause 1 A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}A phone roomba." unknown "Only the finest tool to clean your phone." unknown "Here,{w=.3} let me show you it’s brushing majesty." - - "He feels around his fanny-pack for one of the roombas,{w=.4} then holds his phone out on one hand." - - "He puts the device on,{w=.3} and it whirrs to life,{w=.4} slowly crossing the screen." pause .5 - "When it reaches the edge,{w=.3} it beeps and turns around,{w=.4} making a return trip to where it started." + "He feels around his fanny-pack for one of the roombas, then holds his phone out on one hand." - "After a few trips,{w=.4} the merchant turns the roomba off and gives us an expectant leer." + "He puts the device on, and it whirrs to life, slowly crossing the screen." + pause .5 + + "When it reaches the edge, it beeps and turns around, making a return trip to where it started." + + "After a few trips, the merchant turns the roomba off and gives us an expectant leer." pause .5 show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) @@ -2708,13 +2745,13 @@ label chapter_6: label .buyTheRoomba: - A "Fuck it,{w=.4} fine." + A "Fuck it, fine." jump .RoombaConvergence label .notBuyingTheFuckingRoomba: show anon shrug with dissolve - A "Fang,{w=.3} we can find the place on our own." + A "Fang, we can find the place on our own." pause .5 unknown "You know,{w=.4} this place is well known for trafficking." @@ -2728,8 +2765,9 @@ label chapter_6: label .RoombaConvergence: "I slap down the money on Reed’s maybe-family’s booth." + pause .5 - unknown "Very well,{w=.3} the contest is yours,{w=.3} along with this trinket." + unknown "Very well,{w=.4} the contest is yours,{w=.3} along with this trinket." # changed "bizarre" to "bazaar" unknown "Head east,{w=.3} of this filthy Bazaar,{w=.3} and you will find your Destiny{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -2748,12 +2786,13 @@ label chapter_6: stop ambient fadeout 4 stop music fadeout 4 - scene black with Dissolve(1) + scene black with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 "I motion for Fang to follow and start heading in the direction the shopkeeper showed us." "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + pause .5 "After twisting through the endless maze of merchants and frivolities Fang finally stops in front of a building." pause .5 @@ -2767,13 +2806,13 @@ label chapter_6: yalign 0.1 xalign -0.1 show fang neutral behind anon: yalign 0.0 xalign 0.4 - with Dissolve(1) + with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 - "The building is an antiquated Italian restaurant,{w=.4} with the words ‘DINO-MOE’S PIZZA & PASTA’ written on a grand sign out front." + "The building is an antiquated Italian restaurant, with the words ‘DINO-MOE’S PIZZA & PASTA’ written on a grand sign out front." pause .5 - F "Pizza,{w=.2} huh?" + F "Pizza, huh?" show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) F "In the middle of Little Troodon?" @@ -2798,7 +2837,7 @@ label chapter_6: play ambient 'audio/effects/dinomoesloop.ogg' fadein 5 pause .5 - A "Historical,{w=.3} huh?" + A "Historical, huh?" "Inside is a homely italian styled pizzeria." @@ -2809,19 +2848,19 @@ label chapter_6: "A very tired waitress puts on a plastic smile when she sees us." - Waitress "Welcome to historic Dino-Moes,{w=.2} table for two?" + Waitress "Welcome to historic Dino-Moes, table for two?" - A "Actually,{w=.3} we just need to ask the manager something." + A "Actually, we just need to ask the manager something." "The waitress rolls her eyes and skulks off." pause .5 show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) - F "Service with a smile,{w=.3} huh?" + F "Service with a smile, huh?" A "Working in the industry grates on you." - F "This is a historical place though,{w=.4} isn’t it?" + F "This is a historical place though, isn’t it?" show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) F "Wouldn’t they have higher standards for-" @@ -2850,7 +2889,7 @@ label chapter_6: "An older T-Rex hobbles his way to us with arms spread wide." pause .5 - "Well,{w=.4} as wide as he could at least." + "Well, as wide as he could at least." show moe behind fang: ease_cubic 1 xalign 0.9 @@ -2864,7 +2903,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang squawks in protest as she’s pressed into his apron covered belly." - F "U-{w=.1}uncle M-{w=.1}Moe?{w=.5} What are you doing here?" + F "U-uncle M-Moe?{w=.4} What are you doing here?" show fang: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.5 @@ -2872,12 +2911,12 @@ label chapter_6: ease_cubic 1 xalign 1.4 show fang surprised with dissolve - Moe "I’m workin’,{w=.2} toots!" + Moe "I’m workin’, toots!" Moe "Dis is my restaurant!" pause .4 - A "Hold up.{w=.4} Your uncle is Moe.{w=.5} Moe as in the Moe that started Dino-Moe’s?" + A "Hold up. Your uncle is Moe. Moe as in the Moe that started Dino-Moe’s?" show fang sad with Dissolve(.25) F "No!{w=.4} I mean{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} I don’t know!" @@ -2888,9 +2927,9 @@ label chapter_6: pause .25 show anon concerned with Dissolve(.25) - "I feel my own skin warm up now.{w=.4} The old T-Rex laughs louder and slaps his rotund belly." + "I feel my own skin warm up now. The old T-Rex laughs louder and slaps his rotund belly." - Moe "Relax kids,{w=.4} I’m messin’ wit ya.{w=.5} Come on I’ll gives ya da bes’ seats in da house." + Moe "Relax kids, I’m messin’ wit ya. Come on I’ll gives ya da bes’ seats in da house." show fang behind moe show moe behind anon: @@ -2940,14 +2979,14 @@ label chapter_6: "The hell is happening?!" - Moe "Now yous twos wait right there while I make my lil princess’ favrite pie.{w=.5} On me,{w=.3} o’ course." - - stop music fadeout 4 + Moe "Now yous twos wait right there while I make my lil princess’ favrite pie. On me, o’ course." + stop music fadeout 6 play ambient 'audio/effects/dinomoesloop.ogg' volume .5 fadein 4 - - "Moe proceeds to saunter off,{w=.4} pushing through the double doors that probably led to the kitchen." pause .5 + "Moe proceeds to saunter off, pushing through the double doors that probably led to the kitchen." + pause 1 + "I look over the candle to Fang." "She looks how I feel at the moment." @@ -2962,14 +3001,16 @@ label chapter_6: A "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "Fuck.{w=.4} Come on Anon, you can do it." + # B: should 'reddit' be gruggified? - "Fuck.{w=.4} Come on Anon,{w=.4} you can do it.{w=.5} You were part of the team that kicked Reddit’s ass in Claws of Duty: Jurassic Warfare." + "You were part of the team that kicked Reddit’s ass in Claws of Duty: Jurassic Warfare." pause .5 A "Is that really your uncle?" show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) - F "No,{w=.3} he’s just a good family friend." + F "No, he’s just a good family friend." F "My dad goes bowling every Thursday with him." pause .5 @@ -2984,7 +3025,7 @@ label chapter_6: F "All that sportsy stuff doesn’t appeal to me." show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) - F "Besides,{w=.4} I have school and band stuff to worry about." + F "Besides, I have school and band stuff to worry about." show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) F "Not to mention my dad’s a bit of an asshole." @@ -3000,7 +3041,7 @@ label chapter_6: F "Whenever I’m listening to my music at night he always yells through the door about ‘audible bowel movements’." pause .5 - A "Honestly,{w=.4} do you blame him?" + A "Honestly, do you blame him?" stop ambient fadeout 4 play music 'audio/ost/appreciating the atmosphere.ogg' fadein 1.0 @@ -3010,17 +3051,17 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang smirks." F "Maybe not." - pause .5 + pause 1 A "My dad isn’t even really there most of the time." show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) - A "When I do interact with him,{w=.4} it’s just these huge orders about what to do with myself." + A "When I do interact with him, it’s just these huge orders about what to do with myself." - A "\"You’re going to camp\",{w=.5} \"you’re going to Brazil\",{w=.5} \"you’re going to some coastal town for half a year\"." + A "\"You’re going to camp\", \"you’re going to Brazil\", \"you’re going to some coastal town for half a year\"." pause .5 - A "Then again,{w=.4} that last one was more my fault." + A "Then again, that last one was more my fault." pause .5 F "Sounds rough." @@ -3030,10 +3071,10 @@ label chapter_6: A "What about her?" - A "Pretty standard mother,{w=.4} a bit naggy." + A "Pretty standard mother, a bit naggy." pause .5 - A "She’d always try to dress me for school,{w=.4} so i’d look like the biggest dork ever." + A "She’d always try to dress me for school, so i’d look like the biggest dork ever." show anon sad flip with Dissolve(.25) A "One time she got me into a denim jacket and jeans combo." @@ -3078,14 +3119,15 @@ label chapter_6: show anon sad flip show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - pause .5 + pause 1 - "You know,{w=.4} hot wax really only hurts for the first few seconds." + "You know, hot wax really only hurts for the first few seconds." - "That cute look of surprise though?{w=.6} Lasting for eternity." + "That cute look of surprise though?{w=.4} Lasting for eternity." pause .5 F "Breathe a word of that to anyone and this candle is going up where the sun don’t shine while it’s still lit." + pause .5 show anon neutral flip with dissolve "I scrape the hardened wax on my forehead off with one hand." @@ -3093,26 +3135,29 @@ label chapter_6: ease 1 xalign 0.85 pause .5 - A "Alright alright.{w=.4} Sheesh.{w=.5} But what about your mom?" + A "Alright alright.{w=.4} Sheesh." + + A "But what about your mom?" - A "Is she like,{w=.4} on heroin or something?" + A "Is she like, on heroin or something?" show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) - F "Ha,{w=.3} no.{w=.5} She’s just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} always in her own little world." + F "Ha, no.{w=.4} She’s just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} always in her own little world." - F "Nothing is ever wrong,{w=.4} there’s no flaws with anything{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + F "Nothing is ever wrong, there’s no flaws with anything{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" F "No concern is worth worrying about." - A "Ah.{w=.4} Yeah,{w=.3} that can’t be healthy." + A "Ah. Yeah, that can’t be healthy." - F "Eh,{w=.4} I’ve made do so far." + F "Eh, I’ve made do so far." pause .5 - A "Well,{w=.3} for what it’s worth,{w=.4} you’ve still got Trish,{w=.3} Reed{w=.2} and Naser." + A "Well, for what it’s worth, you’ve still got Trish, Reed and Naser." show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) - F "Pffft.{w=.5} Yeah,{w=.4} the one whose horn is more important than finding a place,{w=.4} my shitty baby brother,{w=.3} and Reed." + F "Pffft.{w=.4} Yeah, the one whose horn is more important than finding a place, my shitty baby brother, and Reed." + pause .5 show fang: easein_back 1.5 yalign -0.1 xalign -0.1 @@ -3120,24 +3165,29 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - F "The new guy is the only one I can rely on.{w=.5} {cps=*.4}My life sucks.{/cps}" + F "The new guy is the only one I can rely on." + + "{cps=*.4}My life sucks.{/cps}" pause .5 - A "{cps=*.5}Hmmmm,{/cps}{w=.4} I dunno{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + A "Hmmmm, I dunno{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + + F "We haven’t found a venue and our show is in a week." - F "We haven’t found a venue and our show is in a week.{w=.75} {nw}" show fang considering: easein_back 1 yalign 0.0 xalign 0.05 - extend "Gah!{w=.6} Fuckin’ Naomi!{w=.5} Fuckin’ Dad!" + "Gah!{w=.6} Fuckin’ Naomi!{w=.5} Fuckin’ Dad!" pause .5 - A "On the flip-side,{w=.4} we’re getting some of your favorite pizza at one of the pricier italian places around.{w=.5} For free too." + A "On the flip-side, we’re getting some of your favorite pizza at one of the pricier italian places around. For free too." show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) F "But the venue{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - stop music fadeout 4 - A "We still have time.{w=.5} So,{w=.4} pizza first and then we find a place for your show." + A "We still have time." + + stop music fadeout 6 + A "So, pizza first and then we find a place for your show." pause .5 Moe "Someone say pizza?" @@ -3150,7 +3200,7 @@ label chapter_6: show moe: easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.6 with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 Moe "Someone order a fuckin’ pizza?!" @@ -3159,16 +3209,16 @@ label chapter_6: ease_cubic 1 xalign 1.6 "Moe slides a large pizza onto the table in front of us." - Moe "A pizza with extra sausage,{w=.3} anchovies,{w=.3} pepperoni{w=.3} and ham,{w=.5} also known as the Moe’s Original Meateor Pizza,{w=.4} Lucy’s favorite!" + Moe "A pizza with extra sausage, anchovies, pepperoni and ham, also known as the Moe’s Original Meateor Pizza, Lucy’s favorite!" pause .5 - F "I go by Fang now,{w=.4} actually." + F "I go by Fang now, actually." show moe: easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.65 - Moe "Whoa-hoa!{w=.4} The youth are getting uppity with me!" + Moe "Whoa-hoa! The youth are getting uppity with me!" - Moe "Ya try’na make ol’ Moe confused,{w=.3} ya punk?" + Moe "Ya try’na make ol’ Moe confused, ya punk?" show moe: ease_cubic 1 xalign 0.7 @@ -3189,11 +3239,11 @@ label chapter_6: Moe "So what’ve you punks been up to?" - A "Actually,{w=.2} mister Moe,{w=.4} we were going to ask-" + A "Actually, mister Moe, we were going to ask-" show moe: easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.65 - Moe "Mister?{w=.5} Young punk ya don’ need ta be so formal." + Moe "Mister?{w=.4} Young punk ya don’ need ta be so formal." show anon: easein_back 1 xalign 0.75 @@ -3213,12 +3263,12 @@ label chapter_6: show anon sad flip with Dissolve(.25) pause .5 - Moe "You younguns,{w=.4} I ‘eard ya talkin’ bout yer parents." + Moe "You younguns, I ‘eard ya talkin’ bout yer parents." pause .5 - "Ah man,{w=.4} here comes the lecture." + "Ah man, here comes the lecture." - Moe "You know,{w=.4} the best part bein’ young is-" + Moe "You know, the best part bein’ young is-" play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickpunch.ogg' Waitress "{cps=*.25}Mooee!!{/cps}" with vpunch @@ -3228,13 +3278,13 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 show anon neutral flip - show fang neutral + show fang considering with dissolve pause .25 "Moe hangs his head in despair." - Moe "‘Old dat thought,{w=.3} kids.{w=.5} I’ze gots a pissed off motha ta deal wit." + Moe "‘Old dat thought, kids. I’ze gots a pissed off motha ta deal wit." pause .5 show fang behind moe @@ -3243,56 +3293,56 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 hide moe with dissolve - "Moe stomps away to the reception desk,{w=.4} leaving Fang,{w=.3} the pizza{w=.3} and me." + "Moe stomps away to the reception desk, leaving Fang, the pizza and me." pause .5 show fang happy with Dissolve(.25) pause .25 - F "Hey,{w=.5} free food." + F "Hey, free food." pause .5 - "Fang piles three slices on a plate,{w=.4} catching a few of the anchovies before they slide off." + "Fang piles three slices on a plate, catching a few of the anchovies before they slide off." - "I think I'll only take one,{w=.5} I’d rather not get heartburn at eighteen." + "I think I'll only take one, I’d rather not get heartburn at eighteen." pause .5 - "Man,{w=.4} this place sure isn’t historical for no reason." + "Man, this place sure isn’t historical for no reason." "Even something as ridiculous as this tastes phenomenal." - "Good thing it’s free,{w=.4} I’d be willing to pay a premium for this stuff." + "Good thing it’s free, I’d be willing to pay a premium for this stuff." "Kicks Comet Pizza’s ass any day of the week." pause .5 - F "It really hooks you in,{w=.4} don’t it?" + F "It really hooks you in, don’t it?" pause .5 - "Oh,{w=.4} I didn’t realize I was in my own world for a bit." + "Oh, I didn’t realize I was in my own world for a bit." - A "Uh,{w=.3} yeah." + A "Uh, yeah." A "It’s real good." - "Huh,{w=.4} she’s already down two slices?" + "Huh, she’s already down two slices?" F "Shame I have to limit myself around the good stuff." pause .5 # B: is it even a good idea to try and animate this? - "Fang picks up her last slice,{w=.4} tosses it upwards{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + "Fang picks up her last slice, tosses it upwards{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}and snaps it out of the air with one bite." pause .5 A "Whoa." - A "Cool trick.{w=.5} Do you do parties?" + A "Cool trick. Do you do parties?" show fang: easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.05 show fang flip off happy with Dissolve(.25) - "While she raises her middle finger at the remark,{w=.4} the grin on Fang’s face says it’s more out of humor than malice." + "While she raises her middle finger at the remark, the grin on Fang’s face says it’s more out of humor than malice." show fang flip off happy: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.05 @@ -3300,32 +3350,36 @@ label chapter_6: pause .25 F "You gonna finish that?" - "I look at my half eaten slice.{w=.6} I guard my hoard with an arm bulwark." + "I look at my half eaten slice." + + "I guard my hoard with an arm bulwark." show anon: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.8 A "Mine." - F "Heh.{w=.4} Didn’t want it anyway." + F "Heh. Didn’t want it anyway." A "Mine." - "I’m quick to finish off my slice to keep it to myself while Fang goes for her second helping." + "I’m quick to finish off my slice to keep it to myself while Fang goes for her third helping." pause .5 - "The pizza doesn’t last,{w=.4} sadly,{w=.4} as we continue to take slices.{w=.5} Its’ life is ended in a matter of minutes,{w=.4} when otherwise I would have committed pastacide in an hour." + "The pizza doesn’t last, sadly, as we continue to take slices." + + "Its’ life is ended in a matter of minutes, when otherwise I would have committed pastacide in an hour." - "By the end I’m satisfied,{w=.4} enjoying the feeling of the itis." + "By the end I’m satisfied enjoying the feeling of the itis." pause .5 show anon: easein_cubic 1.5 xalign 0.85 show fang: easein_cubic 1.5 xalign 0.0 - F "{cps=*.25}Aaaah{/cps}{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.5} Uncle Moe knows just how to make it." + F "{cps=*.25}Aaaah{/cps}{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} Uncle Moe knows just how to make it." pause .5 - A "Yeah,{w=.4} your uncle is pretty cool." + A "Yeah, your uncle is pretty cool." pause .5 show fang: @@ -3334,11 +3388,11 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang gets out of her seat, legs unsteady as she fights off the need for a well needed nap." show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) - F "I’ll see ya at the front.{w=.5} I’ve got a serious need.{w=.4} For real this time." + F "I’ll see ya at the front. I’ve got a serious need. For real this time." "I snicker and nod." - stop music fadeout 4 + stop music fadeout 6 # TODO: restaurant chatter show fang: @@ -3346,9 +3400,9 @@ label chapter_6: pause .25 show fang neutral flip with dissolve hide fang with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 - A "Sure,{w=.4} leave me to deal with your uncle." + A "Sure, leave me to deal with your uncle." show anon: easeout_back 1 xalign 0.6 @@ -3380,23 +3434,23 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause .5 - Moe "‘Ey son,{w=.4} youse enjoy da meal?" + Moe "‘Ey son, youse enjoy da meal?" - A "Definitely.{w=.4} Feel like I’mma black out any second." + A "Definitely. Feel like I’mma black out any second." - Moe "Hahaha.{w=.3} Dat’s what I like ta hear!" + Moe "Hahaha. Dat’s what I like ta hear!" - Moe "Glad to make yas date,{w=.2} then." + Moe "Glad to make yas date, then." stop ambient fadeout 4 play music "audio/OST/Fuck You I Like This Chick.ogg" fadein 1.0 pause .5 - A "A-{w=.15}ah,{w=.3} uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} we aren’t-" + A "A-ah, uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} we aren’t-" - Moe "No?{w=.4} Coulda fooled me wit’ dat disaster youse called flirtin’." + Moe "No? Coulda fooled me wit’ dat disaster youse called flirtin’." - A "No,{w=.4} really!" + A "No, really!" A "Fang’s looking for a venue." @@ -3406,18 +3460,19 @@ label chapter_6: Moe "{cps=*.4}Reeeaaally {/cps}now.{w=.4} Why not have it here den?" pause .5 - "I look around at the restaurant,{w=.4} trying to find any real place for the band to actually play." + "I look around at the restaurant, trying to find any real place for the band to actually play." - Moe "Ay,{w=.3} dun sweat the details,{w=.2} kid." + Moe "Ay, dun sweat the details, kid." "Moe grins." Moe "Me and da boys are used to makin’ room for shows." - Moe "Youse jus tell ma l’il Lucy ya got a place,{w=.5} then yas sure ta sweep ‘er of ‘er feet." + Moe "Youse jus tell ma l’il Lucy ya got a place, then yas sure ta sweep ‘er of ‘er feet." pause .5 A "Ah{w=.2} er{w=.2} wha{w=.2} I{w=.2} th{w=.4} huh?" + pause .5 "Anon.exe has failed." pause .5 @@ -3425,11 +3480,11 @@ label chapter_6: Moe "Ah{w=.2} ta be young and in love." pause .5 - Moe "Listen here,{w=.3} Anon." + Moe "Listen here, Anon." - Moe "{i}{cps=*.5}I segreti dell’amore{/cps}{/i},{w=.4} the secret ta love{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Moe "{i}{cps=*.5}I segreti dell’amore{/cps}{/i}, the secret ta love{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - Moe "It’s not shared mis’ry.{w=.5} Youse can complain bout all da lil details in life." + Moe "It’s not shared mis’ry. Youse can complain bout all da lil details in life." Moe "But dat don’t fix yas problems." pause .5 @@ -3447,12 +3502,14 @@ label chapter_6: A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Support?" - Moe "Ay,{w=.3} youse gots ta be her support.{w=.5} She gots ta fix her own problems,{w=.4} but youse gots ta back her up on dem." + Moe "Ay, youse gots ta be her support." + + Moe "She gots ta fix her own problems, but youse gots ta back her up on dem." - Moe "An’ from what I hear from ma boy Nasa,{w=.4} you’ve already been dun dat." + Moe "An’ from what I hear from ma boy Nasa, you’ve already been dun dat." pause .5 - "I suppose I have.{w=.5} Like at her band practice,{w=.4} or on the roof." + "I suppose I have. Like at her band practice, or on the roof." Moe "Like now!" @@ -3468,17 +3525,19 @@ label chapter_6: show moe neutral with Dissolve(.25) Moe "Anyway." - Moe "Be good ta her,{w=.2} Anon.{w=.5} She’ll be good ta youse,{w=.4} I raised her right afta all." + Moe "Be good ta her, Anon." + + Moe "She’ll be good ta youse, I raised her right afta all." pause .5 - A "Err,{w=.4} thanks,{w=.2} Moe." + A "Err, thanks, Moe." - Moe "Ay,{w=.3} anytime." + Moe "Ay, anytime." pause .5 - Moe "I’ve been hangin’ around youse fools for too long,{w=.4} I can’t jus’ ignore the kitchen anymore,{w=.2} youse know?" + Moe "I’ve been hangin’ around youse fools for too long, I can’t jus’ ignore the kitchen anymore, youse know?" - Moe "Give little Lucy my regards,{w=.2} huh?" + Moe "Give little Lucy my regards, huh?" A "Sure." pause .5 @@ -3493,13 +3552,13 @@ label chapter_6: hide moe neutral flip with moveoutleft - play ambient 'audio/effects/dinomoesloop.ogg' fadein 4 - stop music fadeout 4 + play ambient 'audio/effects/dinomoesloop.ogg' fadein 6 + stop music fadeout 6 # TODO: restaurant ambience - "Now that I think about it,{w=.4} how does he cook with those little arms?" + "Now that I think about it, how does he cook with those little arms?" - "I look a bit closer,{w=.5} there’s several toy claws hanging on a rack just inside the kitchen door." + "I look a bit closer, there’s several toy claws hanging on a rack just inside the kitchen door." pause .5 "Somehow I don’t think that was something I was supposed to see." @@ -3512,7 +3571,7 @@ label chapter_6: with dissolve pause .5 - F "Alright,{w=.3} I’m back." + F "Alright, I’m back." show fang considering flip with Dissolve(.25) F "Let’s hit the road." @@ -3524,7 +3583,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .2 show anon neutral with dissolve pause .5 - A "Actually,{w=.5} we really don’t." + A "Actually, we really don’t." show fang surprised flip with Dissolve(.25) "Fang freezes in place." @@ -3539,18 +3598,18 @@ label chapter_6: F "You{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} asked Uncle Moe if my band could play?" show anon shrug with Dissolve(.25) - A "Yeah,{w=.4} he seemed pretty excited about it." + A "Yeah, he seemed pretty excited about it." A "He’s got a stage ready and everything." stop ambient fadeout 5 show anon neutral with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 "Fang still isn’t moving{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Did I do something wrong?" - pause .5 + pause 1 play music "audio/OST/Appreciating the Moment.ogg" fadein 1.0 @@ -3583,11 +3642,11 @@ label chapter_6: "It’s so infectious." - "My arms reflexively support her,{w=.4} wrapping around below her wings." + "My arms reflexively support her, wrapping around below her wings." "Fang’s arms are wrapped around my shoulders as she clings to me." - "I feel something warm,{w=.3} soft{w=.3} and somewhat moist press against my cheek." + "I feel something warm, soft and somewhat moist press against my cheek." F "WE GOT A VENUE WE GOT A VENUE WE GOT A VEN-{w=.5} AH!" @@ -3617,6 +3676,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Oh." "Wow." + pause .5 "I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -3632,10 +3692,10 @@ label chapter_6: with None show fang surprised flip with Dissolve(.25) - "It’s the sound of clapping that causes us to jump apart,{w=.5} faces bright red and breath rapid." + "It’s the sound of clapping that causes us to jump apart, faces bright red and breath rapid." pause .5 - "Back at the kitchen door is Moe,{w=.4} clapping loudly with his miniscule arms." + "Back at the kitchen door is Moe, clapping loudly with his miniscule arms." pause .5 A "Er{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I suppose we uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" @@ -3647,10 +3707,11 @@ label chapter_6: A "Call{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} Naser?" pause .5 - F "Y-{w=.15}yeah,{w=.4} a-and tell him{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} right?" + F "Y-{w=.15}yeah, a-and tell him{cps=*.1}...{/cps} right?" pause .5 A "Totally." + pause .5 stop ambient fadeout 4 play music "audio/OST/appreciating_the_scenery.ogg" fadein 1.0 @@ -3671,21 +3732,21 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Yes?" - A "Hey,{w=.2} Naser." + A "Hey, Naser." - Nas "Hold on,{w=.3} I’ll put you on speaker." + Nas "Hold on, I’ll put you on speaker." pause .5 Nas "Go ahead." - A "Mission accomplished,{w=.4} we got a venue set up." + A "Mission accomplished, we got a venue set up." pause .5 - N "Oh,{w=.3} they did?" + N "Oh, they did?" N "That’s great!" - A "Yeah,{w=.3} we’re at Dino-Moe’s place in Little Troodon." + A "Yeah, we’re at Dino-Moe’s place in Little Troodon." Nas "Cool." @@ -3703,21 +3764,21 @@ label chapter_6: A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 - "You know,{w=.4} it may not be such a bad idea." + "You know, it may not be such a bad idea." "Even if it’s an idea from the Orchid Oppressor." "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 - "Good lord,{w=.3} I’m never going to be able to play golf again." + "Good lord, I’m never going to be able to play golf again." - A "I’ll pass.{w=.5} It’s getting pretty dark." + A "I’ll pass. It’s getting pretty dark." pause .5 N "Aww{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - Nas "Alright,{w=.3} stay put and we’ll be there soon." + Nas "Alright, stay put and we’ll be there soon." A "Alright." @@ -3737,12 +3798,12 @@ label chapter_6: "Fang is sitting on a bench in front of one of the restaurant windows." - "She’s humming to herself,{w=.4} and her tail is drumming eurobeat on the bench." + "She’s humming to herself, and her tail is drumming eurobeat on the bench." "I take a seat next to her." pause .5 - "By now the plaza has cooled down,{w=.4} most shops have closed and the only people still out are returning home after the long day." + "By now the plaza has cooled down, most shops have closed and the only people still out are returning home after the long day." "The two of us sit in companionable silence save for Fang’s humming and tail drumming." @@ -3757,7 +3818,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Except more{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} more{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" "Happy." - pause .5 + pause 1 "The scene is great." @@ -3768,9 +3829,10 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 "Taking the moment in,{w=.4} I almost don’t notice Fang scooting closer to me." - pause .5 + pause 1 - scene black with Dissolve(1) + scene black with Dissolve(1.5) + pause .5 "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 @@ -3785,10 +3847,10 @@ label chapter_6: yalign 0.0 xalign 1.075 show naser neutral flip: yalign 0.1 xalign 1.95 - with Dissolve(1) + with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 - Nas "Mom!{w=.2} Dad!{w=.3} We’re home!" + Nas "Mom! Dad! We’re home!" pause .5 "The ride back to Fang’s house went by uneventfully." @@ -3805,9 +3867,9 @@ label chapter_6: show fangmom: easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.3 with dissolve - pause .5 + pause 1 - FM "Oh!{w=.4} Welcome home,{w=.2} Naser dear!" + FM "Oh! Welcome home, Naser dear!" FM "How did your date go?" @@ -3819,7 +3881,7 @@ label chapter_6: "I don’t know how but he’s looking into the exact center of my pupils with no margin of error." pause .5 - FD "So,{w=.3} Ayy-{w=.15}non,{w=.4} how was your trip with my little girl?" + FD "So, Ayy-non, how was your trip with my little girl?" show fang unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) F "Dad!" @@ -3833,16 +3895,17 @@ label chapter_6: FD "Lucy your mom-" "I look to Fang{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - - "Okay,{w=.3} yeah.{w=.5} It was a date." pause .5 - A "It went well,{w=.2} sir." + "Okay, yeah.{w=.4} It was a date." + pause .5 + + A "It went well, sir." pause .5 FD "What did-" - A "We were able to find a venue,{w=.4} and I met Fang’s Uncle Moe." + A "We were able to find a venue, and I met Fang’s Uncle Moe." pause .25 show fangdad: @@ -3857,7 +3920,7 @@ label chapter_6: FD "And the other half of testing my new nightsick on ya!" show fangmom unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - FM "Dear!{w=.4} Not in front-" + FM "Dear! Not in front-" A "I wouldn’t mind doing this again." pause .5 @@ -3870,10 +3933,9 @@ label chapter_6: show fang surprised show naser surprised flip show naomi keikaku flip - show fangdad neutral show fangmom neutral with Dissolve(.25) - pause .75 + pause 1 "Oh wow.{w=.5} The look on Fang’s face is really cute." @@ -3889,7 +3951,7 @@ label chapter_6: show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) pause .25 - F "Y-{w=.15}yeah.{w=.4} You too,{w=.2} Anon!" + F "Y-{w=.15}yeah. You too, Anon!" stop music fadeout 4 show anon: @@ -3906,12 +3968,14 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 # TODO: night outdoor ambience w/ nature, like crickets chirping etc.? - "With that I exit the door.{w=.5} Once it’s closed I can feel all that bravado evaporate and my legs turn to jelly." + "With that I exit the door." + + "Once it’s closed I can feel all that bravado evaporate and my legs turn to jelly." pause .5 - "I think that’s enough excitement for one day.{w=.5} My first step forward towards the bus stop is so wobbly I worry I’ll end up in Fang’s Mom’s rose bush." + "I think that’s enough excitement for one day. My first step forward towards the bus stop is so wobbly I worry I’ll end up in Fang’s Mom’s rose bush." - "It would probably be a good idea to sit a bit and catch my breath before going home,{w=.4} and take a seat on the curb just outside Fang’s house." + "It would probably be a good idea to sit a bit and catch my breath before going home, and take a seat on the curb just outside Fang’s house." pause .5 "The door behind me slams open and I jerk around to see Naser being shoved down the steps." @@ -3921,6 +3985,7 @@ label chapter_6: FD "-and don’t come back until you’re finished thinking!" + pause .5 play music "audio/OST/Skinrow Soul.ogg" fadein 1.0 pause .5 @@ -3942,18 +4007,19 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Why’re you sitting here?" pause .5 - A "Just catching my breath.{w=.5} Your dad’s a bit{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + A "Just catching my breath. Your dad’s a bit{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser explanatory with Dissolve(.25) Nas "Harsh?" - A "Homicidal,{w=.3} but close enough." + A "Homicidal, but close enough." pause .25 show naser unimpressed with dissolve "Naser huffs and shoves his hands back into his pockets." + pause .5 - Nas "You know you’re the reason dad kicked me out,{w=.3} right?" + Nas "You know you’re the reason dad kicked me out, right?" pause .5 A "What?{w=.4} I know he’s pissed I so much as looked at Fang but what did you do?" @@ -3968,7 +4034,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .75 show naser neutral flip with dissolve - "Sighing,{w=.2} Naser drops to sit on the curb next to me." + "Sighing, Naser drops to sit on the curb next to me." "He kicks a rock clean across the road and into the neighbors’ mailbox." pause .5 @@ -3977,20 +4043,20 @@ label chapter_6: show naser unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) Nas "Hmph." - pause .5 + pause 1 A "Getting kicked out really got you that down?" Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Sure." pause .5 - A "Convincing.{w=.4} What’s the real answer?" + A "Convincing. What’s the real answer?" pause .5 show naser considering flip with Dissolve(.25) Nas "What’s it to you?" - A "Not much.{w=.4} Just figured I’d ask." + A "Not much. Just figured I’d ask." show naser unimpressed flip with dissolve "He stretches his wings and lays back on the pavement." @@ -4008,7 +4074,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Why’d you need to go alone?" - A "You saw her today,{w=.4} she was this close to killing your girlfriend." + A "You saw her today, she was this close to killing your girlfriend." A "Honestly you should be thanking me for that." @@ -4033,17 +4099,18 @@ label chapter_6: "Naser’s arm flops away from his face and onto the concrete." pause .5 - Nas "Ugh.{w=.5} I mean,{w=.4} look at it from my perspective." + Nas "Ugh.{w=.4} I mean, look at it from my perspective." - Nas "Fang is always up to something stupid{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} more often than not these days she’s arguing with either me or my parents{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Nas "Fang is always up to something stupid{cps=*.1}...{/cps} more often than not these days she’s arguing with either me or my parents{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - Nas "At this rate,{w=.2} Fang’ll end up a junkie or in a prison somewhere." + Nas "At this rate, Fang’ll end up a junkie or in a prison somewhere." + pause .5 "I cringe at the mental image of junkie Fang." pause .5 show naser considering flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Mom and dad have pretty much accepted that,{w=.4} so who do you think all their hopes and dreams go to?" + Nas "Mom and dad have pretty much accepted that, so who do you think all their hopes and dreams go to?" show naser unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25) Nas "Me." @@ -4055,49 +4122,52 @@ label chapter_6: show naser angry with dissolve pause 1 - Nas "It’s like I’m not allowed to have problems of my own,{w=.5} not allowed to mess up or do anything less than the best." + Nas "It’s like I’m not allowed to have problems of my own, not allowed to mess up or do anything less than the best." pause .5 - A "Judging by the trophy case at school,{w=.4} you aren’t doing half bad." + A "Judging by the trophy case at school, you aren’t doing half bad." pause .25 show naser brooding with dissolve pause .5 - Nas "I wish it was an option to fail,{w=.3} I mean." + Nas "I wish it was an option to fail, I mean." - Nas "Instead,{w=.3} I’m stuck with no room for error and {i}still{/i} with a broken sister." + Nas "Instead, I’m stuck with no room for error and {i}still{/i} with a broken sister." + pause .5 Nas "And she’s still my sister,{w=.4} you know?" Nas "I can’t help but be worried for her." pause .5 - Nas "But what can I do?{w=.5} She hates me,{w=.5} and I can’t bring up my worries with my parents." + Nas "But what can I do?" + + Nas "She hates me, and I can’t bring up my worries with my parents." Nas "Even Naomi notices I get stressed about it." pause .5 - Nas "I just want my sister to be happy,{w=.4} to go back to normal." + Nas "I just want my sister to be happy, to go back to normal." Nas "But I don’t even remember what her normal {i}is{/i}!" - pause .5 + pause 1 - A "I don’t have siblings myself,{w=.5} but if I did I certainly would have trouble doing all you’re able to." + A "I don’t have siblings myself, but if I did I certainly would have trouble doing all you’re able to." - A "That selflessness by itself should help you,{w=.3} right?" + A "That selflessness by itself should help you, right?" show naser unimpressed with dissolve Nas "Selflessness?{w=.4} You kidding me?" show naser sad with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Her friends would be destroyed if Fang just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} dropped all that." + Nas "Her friends would be destroyed if Fang just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} dropped all that." Nas "Who am I to even wish she were different?" pause .5 A "So you’re getting all this worked up and you aren’t sure it’s even the right thing?" - Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Yeah,{w=.3} I guess so." + Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Yeah, I guess so." pause .5 "I try and parse everything Naser’s bitched about up to now." @@ -4105,7 +4175,7 @@ label chapter_6: "Guess it’s time for Dr. Mous’ psychological response." pause .5 - A "Y’know Naser,{w=.4} have you ever considered just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} not?" + A "Y’know Naser, have you ever considered just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} not?" pause .5 show naser angry with Dissolve(.25) @@ -4116,7 +4186,7 @@ label chapter_6: pause .2 show anon: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.95 - "Naser practically lunges at me.{w=.4} I hold my hands up in supplication." + "Naser practically lunges at me. I hold my hands up in supplication." "I consider what to say." pause .5 @@ -4125,11 +4195,13 @@ label chapter_6: A "Hear me out.{w=.3} Just consider this." - A "Maybe it’s not your job.{w=.5} I mean,{w=.3} you go out of your way to try and help her" + A "Maybe it’s not your job." + + A "I mean, you go out of your way to try and help her" A "Hell even Naomi has tried." - A "But{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} maybe Fang’s problem is her problem to fix." + A "But{cps=*.1}...{/cps} maybe Fang’s problem is her problem to fix." pause .5 show naser sad with dissolve @@ -4141,9 +4213,9 @@ label chapter_6: show naser neutral with Dissolve(.25) Nas "Uncle Moe?!" - A "Yeah,{w=.3} and he had some advice for me." + A "Yeah, and he had some advice for me." - A "He said she needs someone to support her.{w=.5} Not fix her problems for her." + A "He said she needs someone to support her.{w=.4} Not fix her problems for her." show naser explanatory with dissolve Nas "Isn’t that what I’ve been doing?" @@ -4151,37 +4223,37 @@ label chapter_6: A "Remember the show in the auditorium?" pause .5 - show naser sad with dissolve + show naser sad with Dissolve(1) "The perturbed pterosaur sags as he recalls that disaster." Nas "Oh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 - A "Look man,{w=.4} you’ve got a lot of problems of your own." + A "Look man, you’ve got a lot of problems of your own." A "Maybe you should handle those first before you try to fix your sister’s." pause .5 - Nas "{cps=*.25}Haaaaah.{/cps}{w=.5} Well,{w=.3} if Uncle Moe said so{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Nas "{cps=*.25}Haaaaah.{/cps}{w=.4} Well, if Uncle Moe said so{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser neutral with Dissolve(.25) Nas "But why did he tell you that?" "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Shit{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - A "Err{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} y’know{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} just advice from an old guy." + A "Err{cps=*.1}...{/cps} y’know{cps=*.1}...{/cps} just advice from an old guy." A "You know how they love to give advice." show naser unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - "His head shakes side to side,{w=.4} dismissing my dismissal." + "His head shakes side to side, dismissing my dismissal." - Nas "No way.{w=.4} Not Uncle Moe.{w=.5} He’d never give you the time of day." + Nas "No way.{w=.4} Not Uncle Moe.{w=.4} He’d never give you the time of day." "Shitshitshitshitshit." pause .5 - A "Look,{w=.3} he just wanted to give me some advice for Fang and now I’m giving it to you." + A "Look, he just wanted to give me some advice for Fang and now I’m giving it to you." A "So drop it." @@ -4196,7 +4268,7 @@ label chapter_6: show naser: easein_quart 1 xalign 0.25 show naser surprised with Dissolve(.25) - pause .25 + pause .5 Nas "Do you like my sister?!" pause .5 @@ -4205,13 +4277,13 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "That{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" show naser brooding with dissolve - Nas "Explains a lot,{w=.5} shit{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + Nas "Explains a lot, shit{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause .5 A "{cps=*.5}But I didn’t-{/cps}{w=.4}{nw}" show naser annoyed flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Oh god,{w=.4} what would Dad think of the kids?" + Nas "Oh god, what would Dad think of the kids?" show anon: easein_quart 1 xalign 1.0 @@ -4221,7 +4293,7 @@ label chapter_6: show naser: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.15 show naser explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Hell,{w=.2} if Dad finds out {i}{cps=*.25}at all{/cps}{/i}-" + Nas "Hell, if Dad finds out {i}{cps=*.25}at all{/cps}{/i}-" show anon: easein_back 0.5 xalign 0.9 @@ -4229,46 +4301,51 @@ label chapter_6: easein_elastic 0.5 xalign 0.1 play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickbigpunch.ogg' A "NASER." with vpunch + pause .5 + + "He pauses, the look of shocked disdain still stuck to his face." + pause .5 show naser unimpressed with dissolve pause .5 - "He pauses,{w=.4} the look of shocked disdain still stuck to his face." - pause .5 - + A "At this point it seems like you just {i}want{/i} to be a stressed mess." pause .5 A "Maybe I do like your sister." - A "Sure,{w=.4} she’s rude,{w=.3} violent{w=.3} and maybe a bit bipolar." + A "Sure, she’s rude, violent and maybe a bit bipolar." show naser angry with Dissolve(.25) - A "She’s impressionable,{w=.3} self-centered,{w=.3} stubborn,{w=.3} the list goes on." + A "She’s impressionable, self-centered, stubborn, the list goes on." show naser: easein_back 0.5 xalign 0.3 Nas "Are you looking to taste some concrete?" - A "But beyond all that,{w=.4} there’s more to her." + A "But beyond all that, there’s more to her." - A "Like{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} like her passion,{w=.2} Naser.{w=.6} She adores music.{w=.5} Adores {i}playing{/i} music." + A "Like{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} like her passion, Naser." + + A "She adores music. Adores {i}playing{/i} music." - A "And she has these{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} moments where I can see the softer side of her." + A "And she has these{cps=*.1}...{/cps} moments where I can see the softer side of her." pause .5 "The pop of knuckles from Naser tells me I should rephrase that." - A "I mean,{w=.4} it feels like I’ve gotten to see a side of Fang that she hasn’t shown anyone else." + A "I mean, it feels like I’ve gotten to see a side of Fang that she hasn’t shown anyone else." A "A side that’s willing to give a loser like me the time of day." + pause .5 Nas "And that’s enough?" - A "I don’t know man,{w=.4} this is all uncharted water." + A "I don’t know man, this is all uncharted water." pause .5 - A "Like,{w=.3} how did you and Naomi get together?" + A "Like, how did you and Naomi get together?" pause .5 show naser: @@ -4282,13 +4359,13 @@ label chapter_6: A "How long?" show naser neutral with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "About two school semesters,{w=.4} thirty track-meets,{w=.4} and a school election." + Nas "About two school semesters, thirty track-meets, and a school election." pause .5 A "So about a paperback book then?" show naser unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "Sure,{w=.3} why not." + Nas "Sure, why not." pause .5 "Naser hums and reclines back onto the pavement." @@ -4297,11 +4374,11 @@ label chapter_6: ease_cubic 1 xalign 0.4 pause .5 show naser unimpressed flip with dissolve - pause .7 + pause 1 - Nas "Sheesh,{w=.5} how’d we wind up talking about our love lives?" + Nas "Sheesh, how’d we wind up talking about our love lives?" - A "Speak for yourself,{w=.2} man,{w=.4} I know fuckall about this stuff." + A "Speak for yourself, man, I know fuckall about this stuff." show naser considering flip with Dissolve(.25) Nas "And you think I do?" @@ -4315,7 +4392,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Just the way she is." pause .5 - Nas "Anyway,{w=.4} I think dad’s had enough time and beer to cool down now." + Nas "Anyway, I think dad’s had enough time and beer to cool down now." A "How long has it been?" @@ -4331,7 +4408,7 @@ label chapter_6: show anon: easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.0 show anon sad flip with Dissolve(.25) - A "Ah fuck,{w=.2} I’m gonna miss the last bus!" + A "Ah fuck, I’m gonna miss the last bus!" show naser: easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.3 @@ -4345,16 +4422,16 @@ label chapter_6: "And let you find out I live in the shittiest part of town?" show anon neutral flip with dissolve - A "Nah it’s fine.{w=.4} If I run I think I can make it." + A "Nah it’s fine. If I run I think I can make it." - Nas "Well don’t let me keep you.{w=.5} I’ll catch ya at school,{w=.2} Anon." + Nas "Well don’t let me keep you. I’ll catch ya at school, Anon." - A "Yeah,{w=.4} sure thing." + A "Yeah,sure thing." - Nas "And for what it’s worth,{w=.4} you’re not like the monkeys we hear about all the time on Dino News Network." + Nas "And for what it’s worth, you’re not like the monkeys we hear about all the time on Dino News Network." show naser unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - Nas "The kind that hang around this part of town called Skin Row,{w=.4} y’know?" + Nas "The kind that hang around this part of town called Skin Row, y’know?" pause .5 "Just gonna ignore that." @@ -4366,7 +4443,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "It’s{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} nice to finally be able to tell someone all that." pause .5 - scene black with Dissolve(1) + scene black with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 "I wave Naser goodbye as I get up and start jogging for the bus stop." @@ -4374,7 +4451,7 @@ label chapter_6: "I’m mentally fatigued after everything that’s happened today." pause .5 - scene park night with Dissolve(1) + scene park night with Dissolve(.5) pause .5 "I check my phone for the time." @@ -4394,7 +4471,7 @@ label chapter_6: stop music fadeout 4 scene black with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 - "Twelve replies from a single post,{w=.5} I think that’s a new record for me." + "Twelve replies from a single post, I think that’s a new record for me." "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" pause 1