diff --git a/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy b/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy index f94f02e..bc13ad2 100644 --- a/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy +++ b/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy @@ -2143,12 +2143,14 @@ label chapter_2: "Her shrill goody goody sugary voice is piercing through the chatter of the lunchroom,{w=.4} I don’t wanna reply if it means hearing more of her voice{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - N "Tell me,{w=.2} Anon!{w=.4} What were you and Fang talking about?{w=.4} I didn’t know you were friends!" + N "Wasn't that Naser's sister?{w=.4} How wonderful that you're making friends,{w=.2} Anon!" + + N "Tell me everything!{w=.4} What were you and Fang talking about?" show naomi explanatory: ease 0.25 yalign 0.05 ease 0.25 yalign 0.0 - N "I wanna know about everything!" + N "I wanna know all about it!" show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) "Oh help me,{w=.1} God.{w=.4} I just can’t catch a break." diff --git a/game/script/4.anon-needs-help-during-music-period.rpy b/game/script/4.anon-needs-help-during-music-period.rpy index 7114e36..fe21ce6 100644 --- a/game/script/4.anon-needs-help-during-music-period.rpy +++ b/game/script/4.anon-needs-help-during-music-period.rpy @@ -86,9 +86,41 @@ label chapter_4: show naomi explanatory N "Come on,{w=.2} Anon,{w=.4} let's continue our conversation from earlier!" - show naomi neutral - "I need to think of something,{w=.4} and fast." + N "You know,{w=.3} about extracurriculars like the gardening club!" + show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) + + "Urrrrrgh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" + + A "I don’t think I have the time.{w=.4} I’m way behind in some of my classes already." + + show naomi sad with Dissolve(.25) + N "You're talking about Music, aren't you?" + + show naser considering with Dissolve(.25) + Nas "Naomi,{w=.2} please stop memorizing the schedules of the new students." + + show naomi considering with Dissolve(.25) + N "Sorry, it's necessary for record keeping." + pause .5 + + "Naomi places a finger on her chin{w=.15}(?){w=.15} for a moment and stares into space.{w=.5} Suddenly,{w=.3} her face lights up." + + show naser neutral + show naomi happy + with dissolve + N "Wait,{w=.2} don't you share that class with Fang?{w=.4} Why not ask her,{w=.2} I'm sure she'd lend a hand!" + pause .5 + + A "I dunno{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} she's usually very busy with her own work,{w=.3} and I don't want to bother her more than I already do every day."# + + show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.25) + N "It can't hurt to ask,{w=.2} though,{w=.3} right?{w=.4} Just a thought." + pause .5 + + N "Anyway,{w=.3} will you be joining us for lunch again?" + + "I need to think of something,{w=.4} and fast." A "Err,{w=.3} sorry.{w=.4} I already promised Fang I’d be eating with her." pause .5 @@ -99,7 +131,7 @@ label chapter_4: show naomi considering with Dissolve(.25) N "Oh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - show naomi neutral + show naomi neutral with Dissolve(.15) N "Oh!" show naomi explanatory @@ -119,7 +151,7 @@ label chapter_4: show naser considering N "I’ve asked Principal Spears before,{w=.4} he sees no issue with it." - A "Huh.{w=.4} Anyways,{w=.2} I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} Don’t want to keep them waiting!" + A "Huh.{w=.4} Anyways,{w=.2} I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.2} don’t want to keep them waiting!" show naser happy Nas "See you." @@ -514,12 +546,7 @@ label chapter_4: "I lean back in my uncomfortable chair hoping to pop my spine back in place." - # TODO: added to resolve Anon's premonition, to be reviewed by writing team - # "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Bet if I shared this class with Naomi she'd pester me into asking Fang for help right about now." - "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}I can guess exactly what Naomi would suggest if we shared this class." - - # TODO: this line doesn't actually occur until chapter 6 - N "{i}\"Oh!{w=.4} What if you asked Fang for help?\"{/i}" + N "{i}\"Wait,{w=.2} don't you share that class with Fang?{w=.4} Why not ask her,{w=.2} I'm sure she'd lend a hand!\"{/i}" pause .5 "I crane my head,{w=.3} looking for Fang.{w=.5} She's at her own desk she’s filling out her assignment page easily,{w=.4} drumming her fingers on her desk.{w=.6} Almost looks like she’s strumming honestly." @@ -543,11 +570,10 @@ label chapter_4: "I look at the papers we need to finish.{w=.5} Fuck me,{w=.4} how the hell are we suppose to finish these by the end of class?!" pause .5 - # TODO: this line is also from chapter 6 - N "{i}\"It can’t hurt to ask, though,{w=.4} right?\"{/i}" + N "{i}\"It can’t hurt to ask, though,{w=.3} right?\"{/i}" pause .5 - "Maybe the Neon Nero has a good point." + "Maybe the Neon Nero had a good point." "Still,{w=.4} interrupting Fang now might piss her off." diff --git a/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy b/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy index 02274ef..66deb3b 100644 --- a/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy +++ b/game/script/6.anon-helps-fang-find-a-venue-for-band.rpy @@ -1484,15 +1484,11 @@ label chapter_6: pause .5 # TODO: this dialogue doesn't appear to have made the final cut in previous chapters - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Oh,{w=.4} you’re spending time with Fang?\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Wasn't that Naser's sister?{w=.4} How wonderful that you're making friends,{w=.2} Anon!\"{/i}{/alpha}" - A "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"She just needed me for some feedback.\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Tell me everything!{w=.4} What were you and Fang talking about?\"{/i}{/alpha}" - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I see.{w=.4} I think it’s wonderful you’re making more friends here!\"{/i}{/alpha}" - - A "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"Could you really say we’re friends?{w=.4} We’ve only met two or three times.\"{/i}{/alpha}" - - N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I think you and Fang would make wonderful friends!{w=.4} She needs more friends like you!\"{/i}{/alpha}" + N "{alpha=0.75}{i}\"I wanna know all about it!\"{/i}{/alpha}" pause .5 "{i}Fuck{/i},{w=.5} how didn’t I notice?" @@ -2171,7 +2167,7 @@ label chapter_6: A "He’ll listen to you." - A "Hes only doing this because your dad put him up to it." + A "He's only doing this because your dad put him up to it." pause .5 A "I think he trusts you enough to be willing to take Naomi elsewhere for a while." @@ -2253,7 +2249,7 @@ label chapter_6: Nas "Dad said he’ll do to {i}me{/i} anything that you do to Fang!" pause .5 - "Everyone else" "{cps=*.3}...What...{/cps}" + "Anon, Fang & Naomi" "{cps=*.3}...What...{/cps}" # F "...What..." # A "...What..."