From a883acb793631181759691b3a9a9ef8d8fa84f5c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: rachc659 Date: Sat, 29 Jun 2024 13:39:10 +0000 Subject: [PATCH] Up to line 1021 --- game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy | 74 +++++++++++++------------- 1 file changed, 37 insertions(+), 37 deletions(-) diff --git a/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy b/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy index 77bdc12..df6ccfb 100644 --- a/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy +++ b/game/script/2.fourth-day-of-school.rpy @@ -308,7 +308,7 @@ label chapter_2: show naomi considering with dissolve N "Really sorry, Anon, but the tour will have to end here." - A "It was fine. Hopefully it just doesn't make my allergies flare." + A "It was fine. Just hope it doesn't make my allergies flare." window hide window auto @@ -363,24 +363,24 @@ label chapter_2: "Or a mix of the two{cps=*.1}...?{/cps}" - "Either way there's something on her mind." + "Either way, there's something on her mind." pause .5 "I can't help but think that that must be how I looked on my first day." - "But it was my first day of school, she had been going here all year." + "But that was my first day of school. She had been going here all year." "What's her excuse then?" pause .5 "Either way, doesn't look like she recognizes me." - "Objective one out of whatever of the current year is accomplished then, next one is memorizing the class schedule." + "Objective one out of whatever of the current year is accomplished then. next one is memorizing the class schedule." - "And that says it's home room in fifteen minutes." + "And that says it's homeroom in fifteen minutes." pause .5 - "Home room which I share with Naomi." + "Homeroom which I share with Naomi." "{i}*shudder*{/i}" @@ -442,7 +442,7 @@ label chapter_2: show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25) F "What? No!" - F "it's multiple!" + F "It's multiple!" pause .5 A "They're dinosaurs though, right?" @@ -476,7 +476,7 @@ label chapter_2: "I call them poison pheromones." pause .5 - "But it is relieving that she didn't recognize me. Guess Naser didn't tell her." + "But it is a relief that she didn't recognize me. Guess Naser didn't tell her." window hide window auto @@ -493,7 +493,7 @@ label chapter_2: "My class with Naomi." pause .5 - "If there is a Jurassic God, please make Naomi miss home room today." + "If there is a Jurassic God, please make Naomi miss homeroom today." stop music fadeout 2 stop sound fadeout 1 @@ -515,7 +515,7 @@ label chapter_2: with Dissolve(1.5) pause .5 - "The day passes uneventfully until fourth period, Science Class." + "The day passes uneventfully until fourth period, Science class." "I find a seat near the back of the room and watch the clock hands tick down the remaining few seconds to the bell." @@ -547,9 +547,9 @@ label chapter_2: pause .5 show farnsworth at sright with Dissolve(1) - Drf "Good news everyone!" + Drf "Good news, everyone!" - Drf "Today we'll be having a lab on magnetic fields." + Drf "Today, we'll be having a lab on magnetic fields." Drf "Find a partner and get prepared." @@ -577,7 +577,7 @@ label chapter_2: show farnsworth at sright with dissolve - Drf "Hurry up Mr. Anon, your partner is waiting for you." + Drf "Hurry up, Mr. Anon. Your partner is waiting for you." window hide window auto @@ -597,7 +597,7 @@ label chapter_2: hide farnsworth with dissolve pause .5 - "I sat in momentary confusion as someone took the seat next to mine." + "I'm left in momentary confusion as someone takes the seat next to mine." window hide window auto @@ -628,7 +628,7 @@ label chapter_2: hide dimmer_darker with dissolve pause .5 - F "‘Sup." + F "'Sup." pause .5 A "Thanks, you too." @@ -662,12 +662,12 @@ label chapter_2: A "O-oh. You upset right now or something?" show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25) - F "What was your first fuckin' clue." + F "What was your first fuckin' clue?" - F "Last time I'll say it, just do the assignment and don't.{w=.4} Bother.{w=.4} Me." + F "Last time I'll say it: just do the assignment and don't.{w=.4} Bother.{w=.4} Me." pause .5 - "Okay! Got to keep coolheaded." + "Okay! Got to keep cool-headed." pause .5 A "So this assignment, then." @@ -678,9 +678,9 @@ label chapter_2: scene black with Dissolve(1) pause .5 - "With that we open our books and start on trying to decipher who Lorentz is and why his force is magnetic." + "With that, we open our books and start on trying to decipher who Lorentz is and why his force is magnetic." - "Things are going well for the first few questions, I remember a bit of it from that one time I tried to make a railgun." + "Things are going well for the first few questions. I remember a bit of it from that one time I tried to make a railgun." window hide window auto pause .5 @@ -697,11 +697,11 @@ label chapter_2: Drf "How are you two doing so far?" show fang considering with Dissolve(.25) - F "We're{cps=*.1}...{/cps} Fine, Dr. Fernsworth." + F "We're{cps=*.1}...{/cps} fine, Dr. Fernsworth." Drf "I see, and you Anon?" - A "Yeah what she said." + A "Yeah, what she said." window hide window auto @@ -748,7 +748,7 @@ label chapter_2: "Oh Raptor Jesus almighty this is the absolute worst case scenario." pause .5 - "The infuriated pteradactyl's wings spread wide and her taloned finger jabs my chest." + "The infuriated pterodactyl's wings spread wide and her taloned finger jabs my chest." pause .5 show fang: @@ -761,11 +761,11 @@ label chapter_2: show fang: easein_quad 0.2 xalign -0.48 - F "I. Am.{fast} Non.{w=0.5}{nw}" + F "I. Am.{fast} Non-{w=0.5}{nw}" show fang: easein_back .4 xalign -0.3 - F "I. Am. Non.{fast} Binary." + F "I. Am. Non-{fast}binary." "How was I supposed to know something so trivial would set something like this off?!" pause .5 @@ -821,7 +821,7 @@ label chapter_2: "All eyes are on Fang." - "And in Fangs' eyes I see something flash briefly." + "And in Fang's eyes, I see something flash briefly." "Judging by those exaggerated movements and the eloquent speech, this is something Fang had been practicing." pause .5 @@ -829,10 +829,10 @@ label chapter_2: "This was supposed to be a big moment where she stopped an evil bigot and the whole class would clap." pause .5 - "In all her planning and practice Fang had made one crucial error." + "In all her planning and practice, Fang had made one crucial error..." pause 1 - "Nobody cared." + "...nobody cared." window hide window auto @@ -858,7 +858,7 @@ label chapter_2: "Dr. Fernsworth turns a sympathetic look towards me." - Drf "Forgive them, Anon, you must understand that Fang is{cps=*.1}...{/cps} experiencing issues." + Drf "Forgive them, Anon. You must understand that Fang is{cps=*.1}...{/cps} experiencing issues." window hide window auto @@ -899,7 +899,7 @@ label chapter_2: show fang sad flip at sright with Dissolve(2) pause .5 - "After a few moments Fang comes back in and sits down without a word." + "After a few moments, Fang comes back in and sits down without a word." pause .5 show fang sad flip: @@ -980,7 +980,7 @@ label chapter_2: pass # use this instead when the outcome doesnt matter - copy-pasting identical dialogue should always be avoided - "Sorry Fang I should have known from your feminine appearance and dress that you are, in fact, non-binary...": + "Sorry, Fang. I should have known from your feminine appearance and dress that you are, in fact, non-binary...": pass @@ -1004,9 +1004,9 @@ label chapter_2: "There's a brief pause until Fang speaks up again." pause .5 - F "Yes. Naser's my baby brother, why do you ask?" + F "Yes. Naser's my baby brother. Why do you ask?" - A "I was just curious, Naser has been helping me settle into the school." + A "I was just curious. Naser has been helping me settle into the school." F "Of course he did. {w=.4}{nw}" show fang unimpressed @@ -1700,7 +1700,7 @@ label chapter_2: "He holds out my backpack to me." - Re "‘Ere ya go, man." + Re "'Ere ya go, man." pause .5 show reed: @@ -1795,7 +1795,7 @@ label chapter_2: A "Hrmmm{cps=*.1}...{/cps}" - Re "‘s fine for you to be worried." + Re "'s fine for you to be worried." Re "You'll see, she's plenty nice." pause .5 @@ -2025,7 +2025,7 @@ label chapter_2: A "When did you-{w=.5} {i}How{/i}?!" show reed explanatory flip - Re "Come on, man, I've got a mean case of munchies." + Re "Come on, man, I've got a mean case of the munchies." show reed neutral flip with Dissolve(.25) window hide window auto @@ -2067,7 +2067,7 @@ label chapter_2: show trish neutral show fang unimpressed with dissolve - F "What do you mean my halter top is ‘out' right now? I haven't noticed a difference." + F "What do you mean my halter top is 'out' right now? I haven't noticed a difference." show trish explanatory with Dissolve(.25) T "I'm telling you, the next thing is going to be leotards."