rework concert disaster & subsequent run in with Spears

game/script/1.first-two-days-anon-meets-fang.rpy

@@ -942,7 +942,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Nas "I did."
 
-    "I take a box down from the stack. Others have already started stacking their plates."
+    "I take a box down from the stack.{w=0.3} Others have already started stacking their plates."
 
     "I check the logo on the box."
 
@@ -974,6 +974,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     "I lean against the wall, chewing bits of supreme and observing the rest of the crowd."
 
+    show dimmer_light behind anon with dissolve
+
     unknown "{cps=*0.6}-nother shitshow-{/cps}"
 
     unknown "{cps=*0.6}She’s so stupid-{/cps}"
@@ -982,6 +984,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     unknown "{cps=*0.6}Bunch of losers-{/cps}"
 
+    hide dimmer_light with dissolve
+
     "Everyone seems to share the same sentiment."
 
     "So why the hell did they even show up for this?"
@@ -1004,13 +1008,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Nas "{i}What?!{/i}{fast}"
 
-    # show anon neutral at acenter with move
+    # VERY angry dinosaur vibrating at incredible high speed
-    # show anon neutral flip at aright with move
-
-    # show naser angry flip at ncenter with dissolve
-    # show naser angry flip at sleft with move
-
-    # ANGERY dinosaurs vibrating at incredible high speed
     show naser angry flip:
         linear 0.05 xalign 0.595
         linear 0.05 xalign 0.605
@@ -1067,7 +1065,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     Nas "Fa-{w=0.5}{nw}"
 
     window hide 
-    with hpunch
+    with hpunch # TODO: some crash / crack SFX would punctuate these interruptions, think AA
 
     "The voice on the other end is loud and shrill." 
 
@@ -1094,7 +1092,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show naser neutral with Dissolve(0.25)
 
-    Nas "Look,{w=0.4} whatever happens{w=0.3} promise you won’t hold this against them."
+    Nas "Look,{w=0.5} whatever happens{w=0.3} promise you won’t hold this against them."
 
     Nas "They're actually a really a nice person once you get to know them"
 
@@ -1110,61 +1108,63 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     hide naser with Dissolve(1.5)
 
-    "I enter the hall and take a seat in the back, away from the rest of the crowd."
+    "I enter the hall and take a seat in the back,{w=0.3} away from the rest of the crowd."
 
     scene black with fade
 
     "The lights dim and the curtains are drawn open."
 
-    stop music fadeout 1.0
+    stop music fadeout 1.0  # TODO: was there meant to be music playing before this?
 
-    scene fang band playing with fade
+    scene fang band playing with Dissolve(2.0)
 
     "Onstage is a trio of people my age."
 
-    "I think Fang is the drummer? He doesn’t look related to Naser, maybe it is the main front-woman?"
+    "I think Fang is the drummer?{w=0.5} He doesn’t look related to Naser,{w=0.4} maybe it is the main front-woman?"
 
     "That must be Naser’s sister."
 
     A "Wh-"
 
-    "Then why the whole confusion over her sex? For fuck’s sake."
+    "Then why the whole confusion over her sex?{w=0.4} For fuck’s sake."
 
-    "I’m just getting thrown around today. I don’t know."
+    "I’m just getting thrown around today.{w=0.5} I don’t know."
 
     "She looks familiar."
 
     "The band doesn’t bother introducing themselves."
 
-
     play music 'audio/OST/The Hunt for more (You)s.ogg'
 
     "Instead the purple one begins plucking her bass."
 
     "It all went tumbling down from there."
 
-    "What I thought was a guitar sounded horrifically wrong, far too heavy."
+    "What I thought was a guitar sounded horrifically wrong,{w=0.5} far too heavy."
 
     "The lead guitarist was using a fucking bass."
 
     "And then the vocals kicked in."
 
-    "It’s horrific screeching, combined with the amelodious shredding on a bass created a cacophony equal to hundreds of cats ritualistically sacrificed."
+    "It’s horrific screeching,{w=0.3} combined with the amelodious shredding on a bass created a cacophony equal to hundreds of cats ritualistically sacrificed."
 
     "I fight the urge to cover my ears."
 
-    "I don’t know too much about music, but even I know that you don’t use two basses in one band unless you know exactly what you’re doing."
+    "I don’t know too much about music,{w=0.4} but even I know that you don’t use two basses in one band unless you know exactly what you’re doing."
 
-    "Ooooooh nooooooo."
+    "{cps=*0.4}Ooooooh nooooooo.{/cps}"
 
-    "Ooooooooh God."
+    "{cps=*0.5}Ooooooooh{/cps} God."
 
-    "What were they thinking?!"
+    "What were they thinking?!{fast}" with vpunch
 
     "I looked back to the crowd to gauge their interest."
 
     "Surely I’m not alone in thinking this is an absolute travesty."
     unknown "PFFFT AHAHAHA THEY STILL FUCKING SUCK!!"
+
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' volume 1.5 fadein 2.0
+    
     #(In-CG insult layers)
     window hide
     $ i = 0
@@ -1175,34 +1175,37 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     #(In-CG insult layers)
 
-    "The crowd was standing, jeering and laughing with whoever said that."
+    "The crowd was standing,{w=0.3} jeering and laughing with whoever said that."
 
     "More words were said but the laughter eclipsed them and the music."
 
-    "Wait, what happened to the music?"
+    "Wait,{w=0.4} what happened to the music?"
 
-    "On-stage, the trio looked panicked."
+    "On-stage,{w=0.3} the trio looked panicked."
 
-    "The drummer was inching off stage, while the purple bassist was about to break down into tears."
+    "The drummer was inching off stage,{w=0.4} while the purple bassist was about to break down into tears."
 
-    "But the frontwoman stood there. Stood her ground."
+    "But the frontwoman stood there.{w=0.7} Stood her ground."
 
     #(In-CG insult layers)
     window hide
     $ showCG()
     #(In-CG insult layers)
 
-    scene fang band screaming
+    scene fang band screaming with vpunch
 
-    unknown "FUCK YOU!"
+    unknown "{b}FUCK YOU!{/b}{fast}"
 
-    "She tossed her bass aside, raising both hands and proudly displaying a finger on each of them."
+    "She tossed her bass aside,{w=0.3} raising both hands and proudly displaying a finger on each of them."
 
     unknown "FUCK ALL OF YOU!"
 
-    unknown "NO ONE WOULD WANT TO FUCK YOU, BITCH!"
+    window hide
+    pause 0.5
 
-    "Pffft… That struck a chord with her."
+    unknown "NO ONE WOULD WANT TO FUCK YOU,{w=0.2} BITCH!"
+
+    "Pffft{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}{w=0.2} That struck a chord with her."
 
     #(In-CG insult layers)
 
@@ -1214,7 +1217,7 @@ label chapter_1:
       $ i = i + 1
     #(In-CG insult layers)
 
-    "I watch as she grabs her bass and takes the arm of the purple one, rushing off stage with the pink drummer."
+    "I watch as she grabs her bass and takes the arm of the purple one,{w=0.3} rushing off stage with the pink drummer."
 
     scene black with fade
 
@@ -1226,16 +1229,21 @@ label chapter_1:
       pause 1
       $ i = i + 1
 
-    "Oh God I can’t take this, I’m gonna grow a 6 pack from laughing so much, I’m just gonna grab my pizza and leave"
+    "Oh God I can’t take this,{w=0.3} I’m gonna grow a 6 pack from laughing so much,{w=0.5} I’m just gonna grab my pizza and leave"
+
+    stop ambient fadeout 2.0
+
     scene auditorium
     show anon neutral flip at aright
     show spears neutral at sleft
+    show dimmer_darker behind anon, spears
     with fade
-    "I turn towards the door and see Principal Spears, a fierce glare freezing me in place."
 
-    Sp "Anon."
+    "I turn towards the door and see Principal Spears,{w=0.4} a fierce glare freezing me in place."
 
-    "Oh fuck"
+    Sp "Anon.{fast}"
+
+    "{cps=*0.2}Oh fuck{/cps}"
 
     "His voice is even more stern than this morning."
 
@@ -1245,41 +1253,54 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Sp "I don’t want to hear about any of this come tomorrow."
 
-    Sp "I expect some goddamned maturity from you, Anon."
+    Sp "I expect some goddamned maturity from you,{w=0.2} Anon."
 
     Sp "You’ll be an adult once you graduate."
 
-    A "Uh… Why me though?"
+    A "Uh{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}{w=0.3} Why me though?"
 
-    Sp "I’ve taught many students, and I can tell these things."
+    Sp "I’ve taught many students,{w=0.4} and I can tell these things."
+
+    show anon fear flip
+    show spears:
+        easein_quart 1.0 xalign 0.5
 
     "His hand lands on my shoulder."
 
     "It’s grip was firm as it weighed on me."
 
-    Sp "Listen here, Anon. You are not the only person in the world."
+    show anon neutral flip with Dissolve(1)
+
+    Sp "Listen here,{w=0.2} Anon.{w=0.7} {cps=*0.5}You are not the only person in the world.{/cps}"
 
     Sp "Everyone’s fighting their own battles."
 
     "The hand squeezes before pushing me towards the door."
 
-    show anon neutral at aright
+    show anon neutral at aright with Dissolve(0.25)
+
+    show spears:
+        xalign 0.6
+    show anon:
+        xalign 1.1
+    with MoveTransition(0.5, time_warp=_ease_in_time_warp)
 
     Sp "I want to see you in my office first thing tomorrow."
 
-    Sp "Now get out of here, this is the only warning that you’ll get from me."
+    Sp "Now get out of here,{w=0.4} this is the only warning that you’ll get from me."
 
     Sp "Next time it will be campus clean-up."
 
-    stop audio
+    stop music fadeout 0.5
+    hide anon with Dissolve(1)
+
+    show spears neutral flip with Dissolve(0.25)
 
-    stop sound
-    stop music
     "Behind me the principal’s voice shakes the room."
 
-    show spears angry with dissolve
+    show spears angry flip with vpunch
 
-    Sp "WHOSE SORRY ASS AM I GOING TO HAVE TO SUPLEX!"
+    Sp "{b}WHOSE SORRY ASS AM I GOING TO HAVE TO SUPLEX!{/b}" # TODO: suitable SFX
 
     scene hallway with dissolve
     show anon neutral at aleft