Punctuation and smaller capitalization fixes

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Nutbuster 2021-10-14 13:12:48 +11:00
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18 changed files with 324 additions and 325 deletions

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@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ label chapter_1:
"Its the sounds that reach me first.{w=.4} The chatter of people milling about."
pause .5
unknown "Bro"
unknown "Bro."
unknown "Its been too long!"
@ -89,7 +89,7 @@ label chapter_1:
"The fog shrouding gives the school an ominous vibe to it."
"I look at the name written on the arch over the entrance"
"I look at the name written on the arch over the entrance."
pause .5
"{cps=*0.2}{b}{size=+10}{i}Volcano High{/i}{/size}{/b}{/cps}"
@ -247,7 +247,7 @@ label chapter_1:
"My feet carry me over the soggy grass as I look for somewhere else to be."
"On the side of the building is where I find sanctuary"
"On the side of the building is where I find sanctuary."
window hide
window auto
@ -349,10 +349,9 @@ label chapter_1:
unknown "Oh my goodness! Are you okay?"
pause .5
"I groan"
"I groan."
A "{cps=*0.35}Never better{/cps}"
"I instinctively apply my chill guy facade in the presence of strangers to hide how uneasy I am today."
"A hand is held over my face.{w=0.5} In my pain addled confusion I shake it."
@ -360,7 +359,7 @@ label chapter_1:
unknown "Naser!"
Nas "Right, right"
Nas "Right, right."
scene garden
show naser neutral flip:
@ -823,7 +822,7 @@ label chapter_1:
Tsuki "{cps=*0.6}Ohayo gozaimasu curassu. Tudei yu habu e niu curassu-meito tsu Borukeino Hai{/cps}"
pause 0.5
"What"
"What?"
Tsuki "{cps=*0.6}Anon-kun puriizu camu appu zen intorudiusu yooru serfu{/cps}"
pause 0.5
@ -1114,7 +1113,7 @@ label chapter_1:
show naomi sad flip with dissolve
"Naomi is starting to look disappointed Im only picking up on Nasers interjections"
"Naomi is starting to look disappointed Im only picking up on Nasers interjections."
Nas "If you need a bit more extra chow, theres going to be free refreshments at my si--{w=0.4} uh{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
@ -1551,7 +1550,7 @@ label chapter_1:
linear 0.05 xalign 0.605
repeat
"Naser grasps at the air unsure what to think or do at the moment.{w=0.5} I think hes angry"
"Naser grasps at the air unsure what to think or do at the moment.{w=0.5} I think hes angry."
window hide
window auto
@ -1863,7 +1862,7 @@ label chapter_1:
pause 1
$ i = i + 1
"Oh God I cant take this, Im gonna grow a 6 pack from laughing so much, Im just gonna grab my pizza and leave"
"Oh God I cant take this, Im gonna grow a 6 pack from laughing so much, Im just gonna grab my pizza and leave."
scene auditorium
show anon neutral flip at aright
@ -2122,7 +2121,7 @@ label chapter_1:
"Soon enough it's time to leave for school. I grab my backpack and slide it over my shoulders."
"I take my jacket off the hanger and"
"I take my jacket off the hanger and."
show anon unimpressed with dissolve
@ -2221,12 +2220,12 @@ label chapter_1:
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
"I just realized I dont know what to say to him"
"I just realized I dont know what to say to him."
pause .5
"\"I wasnt laughing AT your sister,{w=0.4} I was laughing WITH the crowd\""
"\"I wasnt laughing AT your sister,{w=0.4} I was laughing WITH the crowd.\""
"No,{w=0.3} that sounds bad"
"No,{w=0.3} that sounds bad."
pause .5
"\"Weird sisters,{w=0.2} amirite?\""
@ -3212,7 +3211,7 @@ label chapter_1:
Re "Nah man, scool."
Re "They called me because they wanted me to kill bugs crawling on the drums with a couple sticks, I don't know why a bunch of people came there to watch it"
Re "They called me because they wanted me to kill bugs crawling on the drums with a couple sticks, I don't know why a bunch of people came there to watch it."
pause .5
Nas "Right{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=0.4} And youre absolutely sure Trish is taking it okay?"

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@ -224,7 +224,7 @@ label chapter_10:
scene wounds06 with Dissolve(1)
pause 1
"Fang then pats the bed"
"Fang then pats the bed."
pause .5
F "Come here."
@ -251,7 +251,7 @@ label chapter_10:
F "Just try to relax."
"I sigh and try my hardest not to freak out when she touches me"
"I sigh and try my hardest not to freak out when she touches me."
"She eventually finds a sweet spot of pressure to apply. It still hurts a little, but it doesnt cause me to wince."
pause .5
@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ label chapter_10:
"My eyes feel heavy as the ointment begins to warm up, drawing away tension from my aching muscles."
"I can make out a steady thumping on my bed"
"I can make out a steady thumping on my bed."
"My senses fade more until all Im aware of is Fangs fingers tracing circles over my sore back and the sound of thumping."
pause .5

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@ -499,7 +499,7 @@ label chapter_11:
"I can see the gears in his head turning, but his expression is telling me he doesnt actually know what he wants to do."
pause .5
"I'll keep my distance just in case"
"I'll keep my distance just in case."
pause .5
A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Why did you call me here?"
@ -507,7 +507,7 @@ label chapter_11:
Nas "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} Shut up. Let me think."
pause .5
"He sighs, and turns to me"
"He sighs, and turns to me."
show naser brooding flip with dissolve
Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -525,7 +525,7 @@ label chapter_11:
show naser happy flip with Dissolve(.25)
Nas "Yeah man, sure."
"He nervously chuckles"
"He nervously chuckles."
pause .5
show naser brooding flip with dissolve
@ -1906,7 +1906,7 @@ label chapter_11:
A "Why don't you ask her yourself?"
scene sadserangry with Dissolve(.25)
Nas "I JUST SAID THEY WON'T TALK TO ME"
Nas "I JUST SAID THEY WON'T TALK TO ME!"
Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -4415,7 +4415,7 @@ label chapter_11:
F "And we only did what you wanted!"
show trish angry with Dissolve(.25)
T "Because I THOUGHT you'd be ok with it, if you didn't agree with anything I did then you should've just TOLD ME"
T "Because I THOUGHT you'd be ok with it, if you didn't agree with anything I did then you should've just TOLD ME!"
F "You should have known!"
@ -4428,7 +4428,7 @@ label chapter_11:
easein_elastic 0.75 xalign 0.15
extend "{i}YOUR{/i}{w=.2} IDEA."
T "YOU WERE THE ONE WHO WANTED US TO TAKE THE BAND MORE SERIOUSLY- AND I DID"
T "YOU WERE THE ONE WHO WANTED US TO TAKE THE BAND MORE SERIOUSLY- AND I DID."
T "I WAS JUST DOING WHAT YOU WANTED BECAUSE I THOUGHT IT WOULD HAVE MADE US HAPPIER."
pause .5

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@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
with Fade(1, 0, 1)
pause 1
"She gives me a death stare for what seems like a solid minute before she begins yelling at me"
"She gives me a death stare for what seems like a solid minute before she begins yelling at me."
play music 'audio/ost/protestra_punk.ogg' fadein 1
@ -293,7 +293,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
"The driver chuckles at his own remark."
pause .5
A "Were doing fine, take us to Volcano high"
A "Were doing fine, take us to Volcano High."
D "Prom Im guessing? Ya two high school sweet-hearts should stay safe out there! Crazy worl out there innit?"
pause .5
@ -341,7 +341,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
D "Sure, sure."
"The Driver sighs a little"
"The Driver sighs a little."
pause .5
play ambient 'audio/effects/outdoorloop.ogg' fadein 3
@ -628,7 +628,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
"Going great, actually":
A "Going great, Actually"
A "Going great, actually."
pause .5
Sp "Wheres your date, I thought I saw the two of you enter."
@ -1493,7 +1493,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
stop music fadeout 5
scene roomthrash7 with Dissolve(.25)
A "THATS ENOUGH"
A "THATS ENOUGH!"
pause 1
"While Fang is recoiling, I take the moment to grab her by the wrists and rush her over to sit on the bed."
@ -1596,7 +1596,7 @@ label chapter_13A:
A "Look{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
A "You're tired, I'm tired, let's just sleep and think it over tomorrow"
A "You're tired, I'm tired, let's just sleep and think it over tomorrow."
pause .5
"As I drape the blanket over her shoulders, she reaches out to squeeze my hand."

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@ -412,7 +412,7 @@ label chapter_13C:
xalign 1.1 yalign 0.1
with dissolve
"Naomi is attempting to talk to Lucy, overwhelming her with questions"
"Naomi is attempting to talk to Lucy, overwhelming her with questions."
stop music fadeout 1.0
play music "audio/OST/west_coast_kicking.ogg" fadein 1.0
"Lucy's looking on edge, I should probably intervene quick."
@ -641,7 +641,7 @@ label chapter_13C:
T "Seriously, say something!"
F "Trish, I can't even look at you anymore"
F "Trish, I can't even look at you anymore."
T "Why?"
@ -1114,7 +1114,7 @@ label chapter_13C:
play music "audio/OST/its_footloose_now.ogg" fadein 1.0
"The music playing from the stereo sounds positively ancient."
"Probably one of her parents CDs. If it even uses CDs"
"Probably one of her parents CDs. If it even uses CDs."
A "Wait what was that about lights?"

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@ -1801,7 +1801,7 @@ label chapter_13D:
T "Well do hair and horns and piercings and-{w=0.2} oh! Engravings too! Fang even said-"
F "That Id be your first customer, Ive told you a million times by now"
F "That Id be your first customer, Ive told you a million times by now."
"Fang returns from wherever it is she went, now carrying an object in her hands."
#show fang neutral flip with easeinright:

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@ -466,7 +466,7 @@ label chapter_14C:
F "No one ever played with me like that, no one ever approached me like that, it was so pure, so innocent."
A "Should have shown them a picture of you in your high school clothes"
A "Should have shown them a picture of you in your high school clothes."
show fang c happy flip with dissolve

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@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ label chapter_14D:
pause 0.3
"Its the sounds that reach me first. The chatter of people milling about."
unknown "Bro"
unknown "Bro."
unknown "Its been too long!"

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@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ label chapter_2:
"{cps=*0.2}-- Two Days Later --{/cps}"
pause .5
"Alarm is off"
"Alarm is off."
pause .5
"You know the drill."
@ -557,7 +557,7 @@ label chapter_2:
show farnsworth at sright with dissolve
Drf "Hurry up Mr. Anon, your partner is waiting for you"
Drf "Hurry up Mr. Anon, your partner is waiting for you."
window hide
window auto
@ -565,7 +565,7 @@ label chapter_2:
hide dimmer_light with Dissolve(1)
pause .5
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}What"
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}What?"
pause .5
Drf "Very well."
@ -634,7 +634,7 @@ label chapter_2:
# TODO: fill this dead air with some relatively upbeat music to make Fang getting mad more dramatic
play music 'audio/ost/Appreciating the Moment.ogg'
"CHAD RECOVERY SUCCESSFUL"
"CHAD RECOVERY SUCCESSFUL!"
pause .5
F "None of your business. Just do the damn assignment and dont bother me."
@ -712,7 +712,7 @@ label chapter_2:
easein_cubic 1.0 xalign 0.45
pause 1
Drf "Oh dear"
Drf "Oh dear."
pause .5
"Mistakes have been made."
@ -966,7 +966,7 @@ label chapter_2:
pause .5
show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25)
F "Non-binary people don't owe you androgyny"
F "Non-binary people don't owe you androgyny."
pause .5
"Doesnt seem like its something she wants to hear right now."
@ -1397,7 +1397,7 @@ label chapter_2:
show anon:
easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.1
"I drag my chair backwards and clumsily rise from my seat"
"I drag my chair backwards and clumsily rise from my seat."
A "It was great meeting you guys, Ill be going back to my desk, though{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -2547,7 +2547,7 @@ label chapter_2:
A "Uhhhh{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I guess Ill have to go now, see you around."
pause .5
"Be a little nicer, Anon"
"Be a little nicer, Anon."
show anon happy flip with Dissolve(.25)
A "Ask if you need anything, Ill help you out."

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@ -95,7 +95,7 @@ label chapter_3:
A "You guys need something?"
T "Nah, just wanted to chat a bit since we got the time"
T "Nah, just wanted to chat a bit since we got the time."
show trish neutral flip with dissolve
"Theres something in her tone of voice{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -579,7 +579,7 @@ label chapter_3:
show naomi happy with Dissolve(.25)
N "Why dont you wipe that alfredo sauce off your cute little face."
"Shes so saccharine shed give a third world country diabetes"
"Shes so saccharine shed give a third world country diabetes."
pause .5
Nas "Its my sister again{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -1126,9 +1126,9 @@ label chapter_3:
# TODO: cheesy record scratch?
$ renpy.music.set_volume(0, 0.02, 'music')
"Uhp"
"Uhp."
"Fuck"
"Fuck."
pause .5
"I almost said 'the audience at the concert' to her out loud."
@ -2257,7 +2257,7 @@ label chapter_3:
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
"Ok, just for one second"
"Ok, just for one second."
window hide
window auto
pause .5

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@ -430,7 +430,7 @@ label chapter_4:
show dimmer_light behind anon, trish with dissolve
pause .25
"What the fuck am I doing? Im dead if I out myself whilst outnumbered here"
"What the fuck am I doing? Im dead if I out myself whilst outnumbered here."
pause .5
"Trish tore at me like she knew I was there."
@ -463,7 +463,7 @@ label chapter_4:
"Reed puts the projector in the corner of the room, and Trish makes for the exit with Fang."
"I follow after, cheeks still filled with food"
"I follow after, cheeks still filled with food."
# CH 4 SCENE 3
@ -538,7 +538,7 @@ label chapter_4:
F "{cps=*.4}AHAHAHAHAHAHHA.{/cps} {w=.4}{nw}"
show fang:
easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.9
extend "God you are such a dweeb"
extend "God you are such a dweeb."
show anon grin with dissolve
"I flash her my biggest shit-eating grin."
@ -653,7 +653,7 @@ label chapter_4:
easein_cubic 1 xalign 1.1
pause .1
show fang shocked flip with Dissolve(.25)
"She jumps in her chair"
"She jumps in her chair."
show fang surprised flip with dissolve
F "Howd you get-{w=.4} {nw}"
@ -921,10 +921,10 @@ label chapter_4:
"Anon then realized, he is horrendously fucking stupid."
show fang neutral flip with Dissolve(.25)
F "Ive been into playing music since pre-k"
F "Ive been into playing music since pre-k."
pause .5
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Roll with it"
"{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Roll with it."
A "So does it take that long to learn that horrid thing?"
@ -1155,7 +1155,7 @@ label chapter_4:
"She left her phone on the desk."
"I can see the imprint of the password being illuminated by the rooms lamps"
"I can see the imprint of the password being illuminated by the rooms lamps."
pause .5
show anon neutral flip with dissolve

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@ -1348,7 +1348,7 @@ label chapter_5:
"The world spins and I land on my ass where we were weeding."
pause .5
"At least something broke my fall"
"At least something broke my fall{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
pause .5
"Wait.{w=.4} Isnt this the flowerbed?"
@ -1658,7 +1658,7 @@ label chapter_5:
A "except Im sorry."
A "I messed up and that was a dick move"
A "I messed up and that was a dick move."
A "But if you keep this up well both be going-"
@ -2638,7 +2638,7 @@ label chapter_5:
with vpunch
pause 1
"Woah"
"Woah."
pause .5
A "Ow{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@ -4178,7 +4178,7 @@ label chapter_5:
"Fang points at my oversized hall pass."
pause .5
A "Yeah, sure"
A "Yeah, sure."
window hide
window auto
pause .5

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@ -619,7 +619,7 @@ label chapter_6:
FD "You ever play golf before, boy?"
"Don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii golf"
"Don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii Golf don't say Wii golf-"
A "N-no, not on a proper green before."
pause .5
@ -1858,7 +1858,7 @@ label chapter_6:
F "Pssh."
pause .5
"Suddenly an image of Fangs dad pops in my mind and I realize I probably shouldnt be seen alone with her behind a public restroom"
"Suddenly an image of Fangs dad pops in my mind and I realize I probably shouldnt be seen alone with her behind a public restroom."
"Under penalty of holy shit my spleen is outside my body."
pause .5
@ -2811,7 +2811,7 @@ label chapter_6:
unknown "The uncle you seek is elsewhere."
pause .5
A "What"
A "What?"
pause .5
unknown "Yes,{w=.3} I know of that,{w=.3} which you,{w=.3} oh so,{w=.3} Desperately seek."
@ -4388,7 +4388,7 @@ label chapter_6:
A "Maybe its not your job."
A "I mean, you go out of your way to try and help her"
A "I mean, you go out of your way to try and help her."
A "Hell even Naomi has tried."

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@ -44,12 +44,12 @@ label chapter_7:
"And Im drooling like an idiot as I watch Fang bend over a large Amp."
pause .5
unknown "Ahem"
unknown "Ahem."
"Even now her tail wags to that mysterious beat in her head."
pause .5
unknown "AHEM"
unknown "AHEM."
"Not to mention the way those jeans hug her hips and ass-"
pause .5
@ -211,7 +211,7 @@ label chapter_7:
if anonscore >= 3 and fangscore >= 4:
#>>golden
St "Upright Strength"
St "Upright Strength."
St "OH! {w=.3} I dont think you need to worry about whats to come, Anon."
elif anonscore >= 3 and fangscore <= 3:
#>>tradwife
@ -465,7 +465,7 @@ label chapter_7:
A "Dont worry so much."
A "Just don't fret about it, youll be fine"
A "Just don't fret about it, youll be fine."
show fang happy flip with dissolve
@ -516,7 +516,7 @@ label chapter_7:
show reed neutral flip at rright:
xalign 1.3
with dissolve
"Showtime"
"Showtime!"
F "All right! Next up we got 'The!'"
@ -651,7 +651,7 @@ label chapter_7:
ease 0.75 xalign 0.45
repeat
F "OHMYGOD OHMYGOD WE DID IT WE DID IT"
F "OHMYGOD OHMYGOD WE DID IT WE DID IT!"
F "THEY ACTUALLY LOVE VVURM DRAMA!"
@ -762,7 +762,7 @@ label chapter_7:
show reed neutral flip at rright:
xalign 1.3
with dissolve
"Showtime"
"Showtime!"
"I take my eyes off the stage to get a read on the crowd."
@ -1213,7 +1213,7 @@ label chapter_7:
A "Oh, uh, actually…"
"THINK OF SOMETHING THINK OF SOMETHING THINK OF SOMETHING"
"THINK OF SOMETHING THINK OF SOMETHING THINK OF SOMETHING!"
A "I had to leave because of, uh…"

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@ -213,7 +213,7 @@ label chapter_9:
N "Why, thank you, Principal Spears!"
"The projector comes to life, displaying a basic slideshow title card reading"
"The projector comes to life, displaying a basic slideshow title card reading."
A "Reed, how do you know when to move it forward?"
@ -254,7 +254,7 @@ label chapter_9:
"..."
play music 'audio/OST/you can_t sage here.ogg' fadein 1.0
"What the fuck"
"What the fuck-"
"{i}HOW!{/i}"

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@ -406,7 +406,7 @@ label chapter_x1:
A "WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS FUCKING TOM AND JERRY BULLSHIT HOW THE FUCK DOES THIS FUCKING HAPPEN!"
A "DONT JUST STAND THERE AND GAWK YOU JACKASSES GET A FUCKING FIRST AID BOX OR SOMETHING FOR FUCKS SAKE! YOU USELESS FUCKING ASSHOLES HOLY SHIT THIS HURTS LIKE HELL"
A "DONT JUST STAND THERE AND GAWK YOU JACKASSES GET A FUCKING FIRST AID BOX OR SOMETHING FOR FUCKS SAKE! YOU USELESS FUCKING ASSHOLES HOLY SHIT THIS HURTS LIKE HELL!"
A "AAAAAA FUCK MY FUCKING FOOT I THINK I BROKE MY FUCKING FOOT!"

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@ -544,7 +544,7 @@ label chapter_x6:
show trevor neutral
show tana neutral
with dissolve
"The two swirl back around"
"The two swirl back around."
pause .5
"With the hidden lighter between my hands I let the combustible gas slowly coat the palm of my hand."