Done!

game/script/x4-passion-of-the-trigga.rpy

@@ -16,10 +16,10 @@ label chapter_x4:
 
     "I lean back against the wall, my freshly polished horns feeling fantastic today."
 
-    "I deserve it after all the shit I deal with at school. Not to mention the tiny terrors at home{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    "I deserve it after all the shit I've dealt with at school. Not to mention the tiny terrors at home{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
     pause .5
 
-    "A part of me wants to feel bad that I left Fang on their own the other day."
+    "A part of me wants to feel bad for leaving Fang on their own the other day."
 
     "Especially with that useless skinnie."
 
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ label chapter_x4:
     with dissolve
     T "Our chance to make VVURM DRAMA the hit it deserves to be!"
 
-    "Our celebration continues until someone, probably one of the teachers passing by, knocks on the music room’s door several times."
+    "Our celebration continues until someone, probably one of the teachers passing by, knocks on the music room's door several times."
 
     show fang happy
     show trish considering flip
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ label chapter_x4:
     "Then I remember the person responsible."
     pause .5
 
-    "Ah, maybe skinnie isn’t so bad."
+    "Ah, maybe Skinnie isn't so bad."
     pause .5
 
     "Pffft, nah. I probably coulda convinced that fucking fossil too."
@@ -78,14 +78,14 @@ label chapter_x4:
     show trish neutral flip with dissolve
     "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    "I look at Fang and notice them with a look on their face I haven’t seen in a very long time."
+    "I look at Fang and notice them with a look on their face I haven't seen in a very long time."
 
-    "Like they’re daydreaming again."
+    "Like they're daydreaming again."
     pause .5
 
-    "It’s kinda weird. Like they’re too{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    "It's kinda weird. Like they're too{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    "Embarrassed looking? Hmm?"
+    "Embarrassed-looking? Hmm?"
     pause .5
 
     T "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps} You two do anything else all day?"
@@ -123,7 +123,7 @@ label chapter_x4:
     T "You sure he's not just trying to get into your pants or something?"
 
     show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25)
-    "Fang sighs and looks up. Their snout waves back and forth as they stare up at the dirty looking ceiling while thinking."
+    "Fang sighs and looks up. Their snout waves back and forth as they stare up at the dirty-looking ceiling while thinking."
     pause .5
 
     F "I don't know{cps=*.1}...{/cps} he has this thing he does where he mumbles{cps=*.1}...{/cps} I don't think he knows he does it."
@@ -150,7 +150,7 @@ label chapter_x4:
     show trish:
         easein_back 1 xalign 0.775
     show trish surprised flip with Dissolve(.25)
-    "What! With Anon! Him!"
+    "What!? Anon!? Him!?"
 
     show trish unimpressed flip with Dissolve(.25)
     T "Fang, are you for real right now?"
@@ -158,25 +158,25 @@ label chapter_x4:
     show fang unimpressed with Dissolve(.25)
     "They huff and cross their arms."
 
-    F "I’m just saying. Anon’s a good friend."
+    F "I'm just saying. Anon's a good friend."
     pause .5
 
     show trish considering flip with dissolve
-    "A friend? The way they said it doesn’t sound like friend shit."
+    "A friend? The way they said it doesn't sound like friend shit."
 
     "Not like with me."
 
     show trish neutral flip with dissolve
-    T "Puhlease, Fang. Anon’s just like every other guy at Volcano High."
+    T "Puhlease, Fang. Anon's just like every other guy at Volcano High."
 
     show trish smug flip with Dissolve(.25)
-    T "Only worse because he’s broke and from the boonies."
+    T "Only worse because he's broke and from the boonies."
 
     show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25)
-    F "C’mon Trish, you’re being harsh on him. You don’t even know Anon."
+    F "C'mon, Trish. You're being harsh on him. You don't even know Anon."
 
     show trish neutral flip with Dissolve(.25)
-    T "I don’t need to know him to know he’s just like the rest of them."
+    T "I don't need to know him to know he's just like the rest of them."
     pause .5
 
     show fang:
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@ label chapter_x4:
 
     F "Maybe{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    T "No maybes about it, Fang. Their type are all the same. Nothing but loser assholes."
+    T "No maybes about it, Fang. His type are all the same. Nothing but loser assholes."
 
     show fang neutral with Dissolve(.25)
     F "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
@@ -233,11 +233,11 @@ label chapter_x4:
 
     "I hand Fang the blue strat, which they immediately set to tuning just right."
 
-    "Mr. Jingo really needs to get some new gear, these things aren’t maintained at all."
+    "Mr. Jingo really needs to get some new gear; these things aren't maintained at all."
 
     stop music fadeout 4
     pause .5
-    "Even this bass, no one ever even uses it."
+    "Even this bass. No one ever even uses it."
     pause .5
 
     "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"